Karli McDare

Postby lkn4sm1lkme » Thu Oct 28, 2010 8:46 pm

This is just getting sad...

Re: Karli McDare

Postby Opinionated » Fri Oct 29, 2010 9:23 am

I wouldn't say it's that sad. I think, maybe if the writer would make his/her posting a bit more coherent, broken into paragraphs, less racing thoughts, structure and better grammar, it will improve greatly. In other words, a nice writer who only needs to flesh out the story a little more and take his/her good time telling it. To him/her : please do post again! And take your time telling us - we're patient patients!
"Sometimes in quiet desperation you realize it's never gonna be the way it was." - Carole King

"You've just been lonely too long." - Carly Simon

Re: Karli McDare

Postby chloroformmeplease » Fri Oct 29, 2010 10:50 am

Run on sentences and incomplete thoughts as the thoughts jump to the next thought or thoughts as it were. Short but hard to follow. It left me bewildered.
Treat others as you wish to be treated. Having said that I will not sit idly by while someone is disrespecting another just because they think they are better than everyone else.

Re: Karli McDare

Postby chloroformmeplease » Fri Oct 29, 2010 10:54 am

I am not saying give up writing but stories should run smoothly. When describing someone, one could go into more intimate details about the person other then just their height,hair and eye color and age.

We, the readers want to know the characters in your story. Whether such story is true or fictional we still consider them characters. So when I use that word I am not saying the story is not true.

Take time and think what you wish to say. Proper punctuation is welcome.
Treat others as you wish to be treated. Having said that I will not sit idly by while someone is disrespecting another just because they think they are better than everyone else.

Re: Karli McDare

Postby lkn4sm1lkme » Sun Oct 31, 2010 7:59 pm

My comment *was* meant to imply that the story is not true. There are far too many "coincidences" and "conveniences" in just that short little jumbled-up paragraph for it to be believable...

Quite frankly, I'm getting sick of people posting false, misleading, or embellished "stories" on this forum. This is called the "True TUGs Stories" forum, not "Fictional TUGs Stories." There's a forum for made-up tales, please utilize it...

Re: Karli McDare

Postby Opinionated » Mon Nov 01, 2010 3:10 am

We hear you and agree with what you said. At the same time, better grammar may've helped things a tad. Don't worry, what you said shines through.
"Sometimes in quiet desperation you realize it's never gonna be the way it was." - Carole King

"You've just been lonely too long." - Carly Simon

Re: Karli McDare

Postby Opinionated » Wed Nov 03, 2010 3:49 pm

[ someone stuffing and sealing my big fat mouth as is SO called for ]

I really need to stop while I'm ahead :-) :wink: :-)

God I am So _too_ Opinionated. Sincerest apologies.
"Sometimes in quiet desperation you realize it's never gonna be the way it was." - Carole King

"You've just been lonely too long." - Carly Simon