Mister Ace

Postby tiedandtrue33 » Sat May 03, 2014 7:06 pm

I introduced myself to this kid, a 19-year old college kid, who told me he'd do anything I asked of him. "Call me Mister Ace" I said. He said he wanted to be humiliated and controlled. I told him "OK, prove it." He stood in front of me in his dorm room. Wearing a red Nike shirt, jeans, a stocking hat, and blue Asics. I told him to take his shirt off. He slid the Nike shirt off his back. He was a slim guy, probably 5'9" or so, 140 pounds. Light blonde-brown shaggy hair and greenish eyes. I told him to remove his sneakers. He did just that, revealing black low-cut Adidas socks. I told him to remove one of his socks. He did, and held the sock he had been wearing all day in his hand. "Put the sock in your mouth" I said. And he did. Stuffed it all the way in there. "Next, take that duct tape and wrap it over your mouth and around your head a few times" I demanded of him. He picked up the roll of tape and wrapped it tightly around his head, securing the sock gag in his mouth. He ripped the tape from the roll and pressed it against the side of his face. Next, I pointed to a yellow bandana and said "Blindfold yourself with that." The kid picked up the bandana and folded it a couple times over, then placed it over his eyes and tied it behind his head. I watched him for several minutes as he stood there gagged and blindfolded. He didn't move, just stood there-silent. I could tell he wanted more. I walked up to him, grabbed his bare arms and slowly turned him away from me. I told him to get down on his knees. He did that. I looked around, found a fabric belt. "Put your hands behind your back" I commanded in a gentle but firm tone. He placed his hands together, behind his back. I secured his hands quite tightly, giving a few quick tugs which made him flinch ever so slightly. "I'm going to lay you onto the floor now" I said, and slowly rested him, face-down, onto the dorm room floor. He never made a sound. His breaths were steady and controlled. I found a necktie in his closet. I tied his ankles together and then brought them up to his wrists and tied the remainder of the tie to the belt and to his wrists. not the most strict or professional hogtie ever, but I am not a professional and I have nothing to prove. I told him to nod YES or NO when I asked him a few questions. "Are you comfortable?" YES he nodded. "Are you going to try to escape?" NO he nodded. I turned him on his side, noticing his stomach go in and out as he breathed, and took a permanent marker and wrote "Mister Ace" above his left nipple. A sort of "branding" if you will. I grazed his left nipple with my fingertip and heard a very small 'gasp' come from his muffled mouth. I then, just so he didn't feel I was too easy on him, squeezed his left nipple with all my strength for....no more than 2 seconds. His breathing picked up for a moment, but still he made no sound. I patted him on the side of his face, got up and left his dorm room.

Re: Mister Ace

Postby chadmc90 » Sat May 03, 2014 7:37 pm

It's kinds hard to read your story with it clumped together in one huge paragraph. You should break it up into smaller paragraphs. But otherwise, good start.
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Re: Mister Ace

Postby tiedandtrue33 » Sat May 03, 2014 9:49 pm

this is a stream of thought style of writing and it also isn't meant to be a start to a story. it is what it is. a flow of thoughts.

Re: Mister Ace

Postby tony2 » Sat May 03, 2014 10:29 pm

the stream of thought might better flag itself if you stayed in one person: either narrative or conversational (e.g. spoken words). I would endorse Chad that it would be a more effective read if it was a bit more broken up.
Perhaps give it a try and try it out on a few friends both ways and get some feedback on which is the more effective for you??? In any case, keep writing --- you have some good ideas.
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Re: Mister Ace

Postby xtc » Sun May 04, 2014 5:30 am

Bob Dylan has been known to write stream of consciousness stuff too but he still uses lines and verses!
Sorry, but I must agree with the other two respondents.
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