Postby chloroformmeplease » Wed Sep 02, 2009 10:27 pm
You wrote these words " it’s simple your kidnapping you for the week until " it makes no sense whatsoever. How can you kidnap youself? A heads up on grammar also. You're meaning you are is spelled you're not your. It is a a totally different word that means a totally different thing.
Your story is hard to follow also. And would be nicer than & when writing a story. Just thought I'd give you a few pointers.
Treat others as you wish to be treated. Having said that I will not sit idly by while someone is disrespecting another just because they think they are better than everyone else.