Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going (chapter 2) (chapter 3) (MMMM/FF)

Postby Boocola » Fri Aug 12, 2016 5:36 am

Tanya and Brittney are walking home from music class, they are going to prepare for a concert performance they were invited to do. They both play the flute even though they are not that good at it. They want to prove that they can play just as good as any of their classmates.
Tanya has short blonde hair parted off to the side wearing a white tank top and Jean shorts with white shoes on her feet. Brittney has brown hair in pigtails wearing a black shirt and a jean skirt with tennis shoes on her feet.
They are walking down the street on the sidewalk when a van stopped next to them, the driver is a drummer from their music class named Tommy, who is in a band outside of class
"Hey girls." Tommy said "want a ride?" He asked with a smile
"No Tom." Tanya blurted out "we are almost home."
"Oh come on Tanya." He pleaded "The concert hall is five miles away."
"We have cars." Tanya barked.
" be nice Tanya." Brittney said "we can ride share."
"I don't trust him."
"Why?" Brittney asked.
"He is in a heavy metal band." Tanya said glaring at Tommy "they sacrifice virgins."
"Where are you getting your info lady." Tommy exclaimed "we don't sacrifice virgins."
"Come on Tanya." Brittney pleaded " I don't want to put gas in my car."
" okay Tommy." Tanya agreed "but no funny stuff."
"Right." Tommy said slowly with a tilted nod "hop in back." He opened the passenger side door "watch out for my equipment."
"Take us to our house." Tanya said "so we can change" she got in through the passenger side door past the dirty seat to sit down by his equipment.
As soon as Brittney sat down next to Tanya Tommy started driving down the street and drove past Tanya's house
Tanya noticed the difference in landscape "Hey you past our house." Tanya yelled "Where are we going."
"I told you to the concert hall." He said without looking back
" but we need to change." Brittney cried.
"Relax." Tommy said "all you need is your birthday suit."
"Oh" Brittney remarked "Where do we get that?"
Before Tanya could comment on how stupid Brittney was the van came to a stop, then the back door opened with two guys shooting darts at both girls hitting them both in the arm.
"What the..." that's all Tanya could say before she passed out.
End of chapter one
Last edited by Boocola on Wed Aug 17, 2016 6:09 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going

Postby gagged-cowboy » Fri Aug 12, 2016 8:40 am

Heavy metal guys as villains :-) I hope you will continue with part 2 soon.
A little feedback. I am not an expert on narration but I think it would be better if you used past tense all the way. The beginning seems a little weird being written in present and then you suddenly skip into past in the middle of a sentence. However I like heavy metal so I am really curious about how the guys will deal with the girls.

Re: Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going

Postby Boocola » Fri Aug 12, 2016 10:38 am

I am on the third starting the third chapter, thanks for your feed back,When I was writing I was using past tense wasn't sure about that next time I'll won't change was to is because I've been writing scripts or drawing comic books First time. I still have to write the song the band will be performing
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Re: Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going

Postby gagged-cowboy » Fri Aug 12, 2016 11:53 am

I am looking forward to it. In my opinion using past tense is better :-)

Bound around metal, chapter two, Bound in a cage

Postby Boocola » Fri Aug 12, 2016 3:40 pm

Tanya woke up with something in her mouth it tasted like panties, she tried to split it out but ductape over her lips prevented that, she wanted to remove it but her wrists were bound in front of her with rope connecting to both her ankles so if she moves she risks tightening up the rope around her wrists. She felt the cold steel on her bare butt the realized that she was naked in her birthday suit wth only bandaids on both of her breasts.
Tanya realised that she is locked in a steel cage, she could see the bars and a padlock on the opening to the cage, it looked like a combination lock. She looked around to and saw Brittney sitting up in with ropes around her body pining her arms to her torso her wrists were bound behind her back wth rope going under her butt to her ankles that are tied together to rope around her ankles leaving her knees close to her chest bound with rope on her legs above and below her knees, she is also naked with bandaids on her breasts.
Tanya looked outside the cage she saw a group of people eating, she sniffed the air and smelt a mixture of goods from multiple fast food places then felt her stomach rumble and heard it to.she saw a man get up and walk to the cage,it was Tommy.
"About time you woke up,princess." Tommy said with a smile "Now we can prepare to start the show."
Tanya tried to ask what are we doing here but it came out muffled "mmmph mmmph mmmph."she said looking at him through angry eyes glaring at him.
"I can't understand you," Tommy said with sarcasm "You have something in your mouth."
Tanya got really angry at him and stared at him like she wanted to hurt him bad.
"Oh and by the way," Tommy said like he remembered something "You were asleep when we started eating, we would've shared, so we locked you two in this cage." He looked st the lock we don't know the combination to the lock." He stands up to walk away saying that the person with the combination will be here after the show."
Tanya sat there leaning on two cold steel bars fuming with anger trying not to struggle so her hands don't turn red.
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Re: Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going (chapter 2)

Postby Boocola » Wed Aug 17, 2016 1:52 pm

Brittney woke up surrounded by a heavy metal band trapped in a cage, she quickly noticed in her mouth it tasted like panties and ductape on her lips surrounding her head, she was tied in a hogtie with her hands behind her back. She was also naked with bandaids on her breasts. She saw Tanya next to her bound with her hands in front connected to her ankles, Tanya has an angry look in her eyes.
There was a drum set up behind the cage she was in Brittney knew that they were going to get tortured by sound.
"Brittney." Tommy said " your finally awake, must in time to."
All four band members took their positions on stages two with a guitar one at bass and Tommy took hid position as the drummer.
"I said you two can be in this performance...." Tommy yelled "....so here we go."
The darkness in front of the band lighted up to show an auditorium full of people, Brittney never felt more embarrassed in her life.
The singer/guitar player went up to the microphone and said " give me fuel give me fire...give me something I desire." Tommy started playing the drums.
Every beat echoed in her ears it was pounding so our she wanted to scream stop she was barely able to understand the vocals the drums were pounding in her ears with the sound pearcing through her head
Brittney's ears took a slight break the she heard "master...master where"s the dreams that I've been after, master...master promised only lies, laughter...laughter all I hear or see is laughter, laughter...laughter laughing at my cries... face the pain." Them the pounding started again.
Brittney and Tanya started struggling but the sound was to loud that they couldn't think off working on a way to escape the bound that tied them.
It slowed down Brittney made out what the singer was singing after a "I cam"t remember anything, can't tell if this is true or dream." There was still drum beats nut not as much, then the drumming picked up again " Darkness imprisonate me,all that I see, absolute horror, I cannot live, I cannot die, trapped in myself, body my holding cell." The drumming pounded her ears again making her squirm and wishing it was over.
Then it stopped the ringing in her ears didn't stop. But she saw Tommy het up from his seat and grab a microphone " give it up for our very special guests..." he said as he pointed to the cage " Tanya and Brittney." The audience cheered as each band member did a standing bow to them "thanks for coming." He said to the audience.
Tommy went to the cage squatting down " the woman with the combination to this lock will be here soon." He said "we got to clean up and pack our gear, she wants everyone to leave." He look at his watch. "She let I'd play here for free if we captured you two." He then went to work removing his gear.
Then Brittney and Tanya were left all alone with ringing in their ears.
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Re: Bound around metal, chapter one, where are we going (chapter 2) (chapter 3)

Postby Boocola » Wed Aug 17, 2016 1:58 pm

The one with short hair hands in front is Tanya, the one with pigtails with her hands behind her back is Brittney
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