tied and tickled by college professor (M/M)

Postby Jason Toddman » Sat Mar 22, 2014 8:05 am

Interesting story. A tad rushed but enjoyably readable.
Just one thing. i suggest you break any future stories like this down into paragraphs. It would make it loads easier to read and be more likely to get favorable comments from readers. Some people simply gloss over huge paragraphs like this in a story even if it's a short story and the only paragraph. This one could have made five or six smaller paragraphs easily, even without any additions to the text.
A small change like that can make a big difference in the number of favorable responses you get.
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