## Who's in Charge?

Post by canuck100 » Mon Nov 24, 2008 8:44 pm

I'm always a little bit wary when a story starts this way:

> bluestraggler wrote:The girls:
> My sister Kate, 16Â½
> Kateâ€™s friend Rachel, 17
> My neighbour Suzanne, 16
> My cousin Rebecca, 14
> The guys:
> Rebeccaâ€™s brother, my cousin Rowan, 16
> Suzanneâ€™s brother, Kyleâ€™s twin Jason, 14
> Suzanneâ€™s brother, Jasonâ€™s twin Kyle, 14
> Me, the narrator, 14Â½

because the storyline of these multi-characters tales tend to be hard to follow when the writers are not particularly talented. But the use of
Dramatis Personae should have been a hint of the good things to come...
I loved your story. Not only was it entertaining, but it was also extremely well written. I hope you will have other tales to share with us.

### Re: Who's in Charge?

Post by rash357 » Tue Nov 25, 2008 1:46 pm

Fantastic story, extremely well written and a thoroughly enjoyable read - sounds like a fun vacation too! Hope to hear more from yah