taken hostage at friends bday

Postby Mattmey123 » Sun Oct 23, 2016 2:23 pm

Hello anyone reading this.this is my first story.
People
Jack
(15)
Tom(16)
Me(15)

I went to my friend Leonard's house for his bday
We hung out and got board so we went to his dads old camper.We played cards against humanity for a hour and then they jumped me.The used rope and tied my hands over my head and attacted the rope to a hook. They then put a sock in my mouth and put a wrap around tape gag on me. They then left me there for a hour.when they came back they let me go.
Last edited by Mattmey123 on Mon Jan 09, 2017 5:11 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Re: taken hostage at friends bday

Postby Tieup1 » Sun Oct 23, 2016 2:43 pm

Blink and you'll miss it :? :mouthopen:

Re: taken hostage at friends bday

Postby zavulon » Sun Jan 08, 2017 6:06 pm

Not bad, but it could use more detail. Like a lot more :D

Re: taken hostage at friends bday

Postby drawscore » Sun Jan 08, 2017 9:59 pm

A bit short, and one glaring misuse of a word (Not a misspelling), but it's a start. As you write more, you will improve, and there are numerous stories on this, and other sites, that have been written by some really good writers, and from which you can draw pointers and maybe even inspiration.

With practice, you'll learn how to take what you wrote (one paragraph), embellish it into a page and a half, maybe two pages, and keep it interesting throughout.

Writing is an acquired skill, and like any acquired skill, it requires practice to become proficient. You've started. Now, do some more at your own convenience.

One of the added benefits, is that you will learn the language, and knowing how to speak and write, will take you far.

Drawscore

Re: taken hostage at friends bday

Postby xtc » Mon Jan 09, 2017 12:56 pm

Thanks for posting. I'll pm you.
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Re: taken hostage at friends bday

Postby KingMush » Fri Jan 13, 2017 3:27 pm

Interesting story!
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