## Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jon Snow » Fri Mar 25, 2016 5:58 am

Intro -
This is a fictional story about a boy who is invited on a picnic by two of the prettiest girls in his year.
Naturally, he says yes but what he doesn't realise is that the girls have an ulterior motive.
Revenge.
P.S.
Sorry about starting so many new stories at one time, but I have my reasons.
Primarily, I've recently read something that's giving me an inspiration for a huge amount of new stories, and I don't want to forget them.
Besides, I'm going to update these stories, I won't leave them to rot.
Don't worry.

### Re: Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jason Toddman » Fri Mar 25, 2016 6:09 am

I was just about to point out this very thing to you upon seeing this one.
I might also point out that it can be a tad irritating to click on to what seems like might be an entertaining story only to find nothing more than a plot synopsis.
Just be careful not to over-extend yourself. I used to try working on several stories at the same time and wound up burning myself out. Not writer's block - to which i seem to be immune - but fatigue and simple loss of interest in writing my story ideas out to a readership that is stingy with its feedback. I am still recovering from this even after two years of scarcely writing here at all.
Dare to be different... and make a difference.
To boldly go where no one in their right mind has gone before...

### Re: Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jon Snow » Fri Mar 25, 2016 6:28 am

That's fair enough.
I see your point and I promised someone who commented on one of my previous stories that I would make my parts longer and more regular.
That said, I write my stories the way I do because it works for me.
I've seen really exciting stories on here start but never finish because the person writing them got bored or left the site.
I don't plan to do that.
I WILL finish all my stories, I promise.

### Re: Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jon Snow » Sun Aug 14, 2016 11:07 am

Part 1 - Characters
Kirk, 16, short blonde hair, blue eyes.
He is a typical jock, and a player as well. This is the source of the girls' grevience, as he has broken the heart of their friend.
Bonnie, 15, long red hair, green eyes.
Feisty and feministic.
Kara, 15, long black hair, blue eyes.
Flirty and girly.

### Re: Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jon Snow » Wed Nov 02, 2016 8:27 am

Part 2 -
Kirk was a happy chappy.
He was meeting up in his local park with two of the most gorgeous, popular girls in his year.
Bonnie, with her fiery red hair and her equally fiery temper.
Kara, with her seductive smiles and equally seductive curves.
He would be a LEGEND for this.
The girls had come right up to him, in the middle of football practice, and invited him out.
His friends had all given him jealous looks as Kirk accepted, trying not to appear overeager.
And now he was heading to meet them.
He still hadn't decided who he would date yet.
It was obviously a ploy to get him to ask one of them out, the entire "meeting for a picnic" thing.
He thought, hard, about each of the girls.
He would love Kara's long, supple legs wrapped around his body.
But then again, Bonnie had a feistiness to her that usually made girls playful lovers.
Suddenly, a smile crept across his face.
Why only one? Why not both?
Now that was a picture...Kara's legs around him as he buried his head in Bonnie's ample breasts...
Kirk grinned as he kept walking.
He was going to have an amazing day, either way.
And he just hoped that the girls wouldn't mention how he had broken their friend's heart.
He couldn't even remember the girl's name now.
Something stupid, and soppy...
He shook that thought from his mind and continued dreaming about the girls.
Oh yes, he was going to have a good day...

### Re: Picnic Suprise! ff/m

Post by Jon Snow » Tue May 16, 2017 2:34 am

Part 3 -
Kara and Bonnie watched as Kirk approached.
"Look at him," Bonnie spat. "He looks cocky as can be."
"He thinks he's just won the jackpot, remember?" Kara pointed out.
Bonnie shook her head.
"I can't believe you convinced me to do this," she said, her eyes still on Kirk as he walked closer.
Kara sighed.
"Look, just play along. I'll do the hard work. You just have to smile and pretend to like him. I'm the one who has to flirt with him."
Bonnie didn't reply, but looked at the ground.
Kara rolled her eyes. "Come on, Bonnie. It'll be worth it in the end. What do you say?"
After a moment of silence, Bonnie groaned.
"Fine."