## [Minutes into Hours, Metres into miles]

Post by Ravenkin » Thu Feb 26, 2009 6:59 pm

ok so first of all I'm new to writing tug stories, I'd appreciate honest replys about this story, this is just the first part, I'll see if people think it's worth carrying on Anyways! (Also this is for Mistress Bailey) sorry for any spelling errors.
Settling winds breeze along New York's busy streets, leaves brushing through the city's back alleys, begining to bring my eyes into focus I am greeted by a sharp flash back of the harsh reality of my situation, "Who am I?" I sternly ask my subconious as I throw my head into an upward direction, as far as God's anatomy allows me.
The busy streets,the city's life strolling past the mouth of the alley, "So close!" I mutter as I am greeted by a hostage's reflection in a nearby puddle, the reflection almost asking me the questionable event of which led to my ultimate surrender within this gasy, rat infested and soaked Manhattan alleyway; I try my best to communicate with the pedestrians of today's city but only to be held back by a spokesman's arch-enemy, the vicious ballgag which has laid dorment within my aching jaw for countless hours.
Minutes turn into hours, the simple eight yards has turned into the countless ten miles as the jacket I wear bestows my very limbs that belong to the upper body which belongs to a tired mind, my mind,
"Who am I?".."WHO AM I?" I ask myself again, as if I were interrogating myself as letters appears within the sight of my mind's eye, the letters conscribe into a word.."Michael.." passes through my mind as I roll onto my back and look up into the heavens, "Mike!" I yell through my soaked ballgag.
No longer nameless, I relax as much as a straight jacket would allow, my feet attached to the back of it, my eyes granted a beautiful view of the heavens only for a short period of time until a shadow smothers the heavens.
"Mppphhh!!!" "mmmpppphhh" I mutter as I'm purged into the endless void of darkness
End of Part one
I hope anyone who reads this doesn't think it was a waste of their time, but I do appreciate honest feedback and thanks for reading =)
Ravenkin

### Re: [Minutes into Hours, Metres into miles]

Post by IntnstyAngle » Fri Feb 27, 2009 8:38 am

You have a very interesting writing style. I like it. It's a good set up for more to come.

### Re: [Minutes into Hours, Metres into miles]

Post by Ravenkin » Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:29 am

thanks, sometimes I think I end up writing in riddles, I'll try and write it abit more plain because some of the
metaphores I use don't really suit what they represent
thanks again for the feedback
Raven
Kin