I like the story line, but- The story consists of one huge paragraph containing only two compound complex sentences! The first sentence contains over 300 words! That in itself is incredible that it holds together very well and captures my interest. That paragraph should be broken up into at least four paragraphs and probably a dozen sentences. This reply is not the place for a lengthy critique of construction or grammar, however!
The situation you described yourself being in is delightful. I really enjoy the story of being tied in sweaters, hoods, scarves, and blankets. I don't like much pain, but maybe I could stand a little spanking to spice things up. Why not?
Stop by when you are passing thru Rhode Island and we can discuss it. HA HA.