The prince and the pauper

Postby Chris12 » Sat Oct 27, 2012 2:11 am

A modern spin on the old tale.

In one of Londons finer neighborhoods stood the Edwardian hotel or as it was more commonly called these days ''The place no one is allowed into anymore'' See, the hotel was busy preparing for the arival of their most prominent guest yet, Prince Edward VI who came to visit the hotel named after him or rather the dozen of Edwards that came before him.

Needless to say the security for this event was massive and every posible measure was taken to ensure to harm or displeasure could possible befall the prince. Ironicly those measures brought a lot of displeasure to Edward as it meant his stay at the hotel would be belayed for a long while. This was also to be the prince his first public appearance so the people where all very interested in meeting him for the first time.

After month's of planning, canceling and more planning and canceling Edward finally had his security restrained so he could finally start his stay at the hotel.

And so after a long while England finally got to meet its prince.

As the royal limousine parked before the hotel and opened its doors a 13 year old boy appeared. The boy had a light, delicate build and a pale face with long golden blond hair. As clothing he wore a fancy white coat adored in gold with equally white golden shorts. Each of his fingers had an expensive ring on it and on his head was a thin golden circlet. He looked every bit like a prince.

Edward walked towards the hotel only straying to nervously shake hands with the people lining up to see him. When he reached the entrance he made one last bow to the public before entering.

Once inside Edward was immidiatly had to attent a boring meeting with the owners of the hotel who talked about all their plans for the future of the hotel. Didn't they realise Edward just wanted to try out their massive arcade...uh, mingle with the people.

And thus when the meeting was done Edward made an excuse not to have another meeting with the stockholders and raced to the arcade. Sadly for him it was full of people. He could have them all send away but decided not to and just await his turn.

The arcade was filled with kids Edwards age who quickly befriended the prince as they played games with him. Every kid got to play at least once with him and eagerly chatted with him when they stood in line.

The prince spended such a long time in the arcade that eventually all the other kids where called for dinner or had other matters to attent to leaving him to play alone.

''Well that was rather unfair!'' The prince let out as he lost ''Oh, i seem to have run all out of coin to, gotta lend some from George then''

''You know there is an easier way to get coins'' Edward heard someone say as a boy walked passed him ''And 'ere we go!'' the boy gave a strong kick against the machine making coins pour out ''Thats 'oh we do things around here!''

''Wow, thats thats very.....weird'' Edwards cheer quickly turned into amazement. Did a mirror just help him gain coins?.

The boy looked exactly like the prince. Most twins didn't even look this alike. This kid was a complete clone with the only differance being some small freckles around his nose, a slightly darker shade of blond and his face not being so pale. That and the boys clothes looked extremely scruffy.

''Uncanny'' Edward said as he studied the boy.

''Hehehe surprised milord? Thomas Canty and your service!'' The boy, Thomas bowed ''I'm gonna be 'elping you get around for these couple a days, thats what the boss says anyway'' from his clothes, dirty as they where it seemed Thomas worked at the hotel

''So something like my personal servant who looks freakishly like me?'' The boy smilled.

''Yep thats about it'' Thomas smilled back ''Asked for it meself too!'' His dad once told him how much the prince looked like him....and that was just something waiting to be abused.

''Let me 'elp you out with this a bit firt'' Thomas said as he restarted the arcade machine ''You seem to be 'aving a bit of trouble, so lemme teach you 'ow to cheat at this!''

''Amezing'' Edward said as Thomas effortly defeated the boss that killed him in the last game.

''And thats 'oh we do things around here!'' Thomas cheered ''Your turn!''

Thomas guided Edward through every machine in the arcade, mostly be cheating but despite and probably because of that Edward had a lot of fun. He really believed he had made a friend. A poor, stinking friend who talked funny and thought him how to cheat.

''Hahaha and when we teamed up to beat that boss is road brawler five'' Edward recounted cheerfully as the two boys walked through the hallway.

''Hahaha that was nothing milord! i've got a whole load of stuff still planned out for ya'' Thomas laughed ''Speakin' of that, wanna come to that room i'm supposed to clean? we can 'ang out there''

''I don't know...don't you have to get back to work?'' As much as Edward enjoyed Thomas his company he didn't think the two of them getting around to have fun was what Thomas his boss planned when he said he should help out Edward.

''Nah, i get aroun' that later!'' Thomas said ''Trust me milord! i got something great planned for you there!''

''Um...okay'' Edward said a bit suspicious. He could have swore he saw a spark in the boy's eye when he said he ''planned something''

''Thats ma boy'' Thomas smilled. That spark was back in his eye again.

''And 'ere we are!'' Thomas said when they entered the room.

''Um, you got to explain this to me Thomas'' Edward said ''There's nothing here but a bed and a drawer''

''Yeah it aint being used much, this room'' thomas nodded ''But its whats inside that drawer that counts'' He took a black cloth out of the drawer ''Turn around would ya prince''

''Um o-okay'' Edward did so and quickly found himself blinded by the cloth that got tied over his eyes ''Um..T-thomas i'd like you to explain? what now?''

''' 'ow i kick that pampered ass of ya of course!'' Edward heard his friend say.

''Ough!'' Edward felt himself being tackled and fell on the bed ''T-thomas! w-what is this! expla-ough!'' Thomas had dived on top of the prince and started wrestling him into submission ''Hehe not all that strong are ya?'' Edward was a sickly kid so Thomas didn't have much trouble with this.

''T-thomas! w-what the hell! arrgh! explaimmpphhhhh!'' Edward felt a hand cover his mouth ''Mpphhhhh!''

''Those are some nice jewels your haven'! don't mind sharin' with your new friend do we'' Thomas said greedy.

''Mppppnooo!'' As Edward felt himself getting subdued he could feel himself being forced out of his white coat, his ringed fingers getting pulled at and his circlet taken. Other things being stolen where his wallet, whatever else was in his pockets and his pants themselves as they had gold on it.

''And thats that! i just got rich!'' Thomas now wearing a fancy white coat and all the prince jewelry gloated ''Oh! can't forget the most important thin' now can we?'' He pulled the black cloth over Edwards eye's down and tied it over his mouth ''This should keep people from findin' ya for a while''

''Mpppphhhhhh!'' Edward yelled horrfied. This boy....used him.

''Whats that milord? you sound un'happy? but we hadda lot of fun today right?'' Thomas mockingly ruffled the prince hair ''Gotta be seeing you eddy! i got some money to spent!''

''Mppphhhhhhhh!'' Edward screamed after him as he left. Unlike the nicely decorated Thomas, Edward was laying bound and gagged on the bed in just his boxers and a sleevles shirt. That thief stole everything he had on him! ''Mpppppphhh MMPPPPHHEEEEELPHHHHH!'' The prince screamed. If only someone could find him on time! then he could report this before Thomas left the hotel completely

Sadly the room was very well chosen. This floor had little to no guest on it and the stuff visited rarely. It could be quite a while before the prince would be found

As angry as Edward was so happy was his evil counterpart. He cheerfully let the hotel, dismissing the confused security as he went.

''Ah! Life good now, aint it!'' Thomas smilled ''Can't wait to see dads face when i show 'i'm! just hope he aint be drinking so much this time''

Thomas....wasn't the brighest boy . With Edward out of comission for quite a while he could easily pretent to be the prince and rule the Edwardian hotel as one, at least long enough for him to ask for a very large donation and flee before anyone discovered Edward. But now he and his dad would just spend the jewels like crazy and be back to being poor again next week. That was the plan Thomas didn't realise that, looking like Edward would mean being mistaken for Edward and that would bring its fair share of problems, he was about to find that out when a black Van parked near him.

''Hehe there's our target! ha! the brat doesn't even have his guards with him'' The man driving the van smilled ''Guys! go out and nab that boy!'' he ordered.

''Uh? 'ey? whats the problem? You guys be needin' to go to a party like that?'' Thomas asked as a bunch of masked men come out of the van and ran toward him ''Oh! i see! you guys wanna get past me rimmpphhhhh!'' As Thomas tried to let the men trough they grabbed him and clamped a hand over his mouth ''Lets take a little trip prince Edward!''

''Mpprimph Edmppard?'' Thomas let out surprised as he was thrown into the van which drove off with their prize.

A royal families worst nightmare had just happened ''The prince'' had gotten kidnapped.
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There's probably a few difference here and there but this was as close as i remembered it.
Boy, am i glad i stored this after the second time :big:

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby Sacrificiallove » Mon Oct 29, 2012 2:51 pm

And that's what Thomas gets for tying up the prince and impersonating him. Good stuff.

If I were writing it, I'd write it where Prince Edward gets saved by some nice girl, and then they both figure out about Thomas, and go on a mission to rescue him (because he doesn't deserve to be kidnapped even though he's a nasty little boy), and the girl does most of the work. Oh, and to top it off, the kidnappers find out that the real Prince Edward has come to save the fake one, and they tie him up too, until the girl shows up and beats those freaking kidnappers to a bloody pulp.

But that's just how I'd do it, cause I'm a crazy feminist. You should do it however you like. I'll read it! (Especially since it has young tied up boys.)

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby Terry » Fri Nov 02, 2012 2:07 am

This is quite good, however I never saw anything about the prince getting tied up. All I read was Thonas got the prince onto the bed and next he was already tied up. You didn't really explain the tying up process or how he got tied up other than the blindfold and gag. Apart from that it does look quite interesting.

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby Chris12 » Tue Nov 06, 2012 7:15 am

Oh? your right! whoops :oops: i'l be fixing that shortly.

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby drawscore » Tue Nov 06, 2012 1:47 pm

Interesting take on an old story. I would guess some additional twists are coming.

Drawscore

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby Chris12 » Tue Nov 27, 2012 9:42 am

After they forced the shady boy into the van Thomas found himself taped to one of its seats

''THE 'ECK ARE YOU TALKIN' ABOUT!'' Thomas screamed at his captors ''I aint no prince!''

''Your not fooling us prince Edward'' One of the masked man held out a picture of Edward in front of Thomas ''Same hair, same clothes, lots of jewels and you left the hotel he would stay in. there's no doubt about it''

''Oh....oh, w-well i can explain'' Thomas said suddenly realised why these man took him ''At the 'otel there was this other kid! my clone! my twin! that was prince eddy! i just look like 'im a lot! yeah thats it!''

''Don't play dumb with us kid'' The man said ''Things will go a lot smoother for you if you give us no reason to hurt you''

''Wadda you want with me anyway? A ransom? We aint got much ya know'' Thomas informed the men.

''Thats exactly what we want and your right, your family doesn't have much'' The man smilled ''After they go broke paying your ranson that is''

''Not to burst ya bouble but dad's already broke'' Thomas smilled.

The man got annoyed now ''Tape his mouth'' he ordered at which another man ripped a piece of duct tape off a roll.

''T-thats not necissary, i'l keep it shut meself''' Thomas said as he saw that.

''Good boy'' A smile appeared beneath the mans mask.


''MMPPPHHHHHHHH!'' The real prince screamed as he rolled around on the bed ''MMPPPPHEEEEEELMPHHHHH! SOMMPHHHONE!'' Edward had been doing this for an hour now ''HHHHMPPPPPPPPHHH!''

A part of him didn't even want help to come, being seen like this was completely un prince-like, hell being in this state was un prince-like, especially if done so by a greedy, manipulative and evil brat!

''mmmphh...hmmphhh'' Edward slowly started to exhaust himself, boy did he hope Thomas would be in just as awkward a situation!

''mmpphhhhhh'' Edward left out one last desperate shriek before stopping out of frustration, he just couldn't escape.


finally after two more hours a maid arrived somewhat dumbfounded by the bound and stripped boy.

Edward made some muffled sound of happiness not even caring about how embaresing this was anymore. He just wanted to regain the feelings in his limbs by now!

''Ah, thanks miss i started to think no one would find me'' Edward said gratefull as she untied him ''I'l talk to the owner about giving you a bit raise! thank you!'' The happy prince raced back downstairs to tell what happened, maybe play the arcade some bit after that.

''Huh? why are you all looking at me like that?'' Edward asked as he saw his bodyguards look baffled at his appearance ''B-being in my boxers isn't that weird''

''So you got lord Edward hostage you say?'' One of his guards said with a big smile, at a closer look Eward noticed he talked into his phone ''Considering he stands in front of my i think your crazy''

''Huh.....wait a minute....give me that!'' Edward snatched the phone away ''Your speaking with Edward IV of the house of Tudor! whats this nonsens about me as a hostage?''

''Huh? so the kid WAS telling the truth?'' A very surprised voice came out of the phone ''.....kill him''

''WHAT! b-b-but i told ya i aint the real one!'' Edward heard a familiar voice ''Y-ya can't kill me cause you made a mistake! 'ey! 'EY! P-put the knife away!''

''STOP! sheesh just do as they do in the movies!'' Edward quickly yelled into the phone ''U-use him the other guy as bait! I don't like that kid but as prince i WON'T let him get killed!''

''Oh....well thats not to shabby an idea'' The man said ''You bring your royal ass to our Van at snakeway lane and we won't kill the kid, no police and no bodyguards either or else!''

''Man! to think ya guys needed a kid to figure this out!'' Thomas laughed.

''AND CAN SOMEONE PLEASE SHUT HIM UP NOW!''

''I can't believe i'm doing this, for him of all people'' Edwars sighted ''Not that i plan to turn myself over'' The clever prince just wanted their location ''Well you heard where that awfull boy is being held! While i pretend to hand myself over you guys save him''

''............''

''I said you guys save him!'' Edward repeated.

''We'l do no such thing! we are you guards and your guards only!'' A bodyguard said ''We won't trouble ourself with some brat and neither will you! here!'' he roughly grabbed his arm ''I'l escord you to your room! where you'l be staying!'' The guards didn't give a toss about the prince, just about his wallet so they rarely listened to him.


A while later a very angry Edward wandered the streets of London, he had learned to evade and trick his guards long ago since that was the only way he could leave the palace. As such he only went to his room to chance back into his clothes and a stungun for self defence and escaped after having done so.

''Stupid guards, stupid Thomas, stupid kidnappers'' he mumbled '''Ah, snakeway lane'' Edward arrived in a rundown neighberhood ''And there i see the van....now how to do this'' He saw some footballing teens nearby ''Hey! how would you like to make a quick buck?'' he asked the teens ''All you need to do is do me one quick favor and kick their window in with that football, and run away when the guys inside come out and chase you''

The teens just smilled at the prince.....and walked towards him.

''I may agree with my dad and decide to hate poor people after all'' Edward snarked as his jewels and most of his gold adored clothes where stollen from him a second time that day, leaving him in his boxers and a shirt again ''Okay! those jerks are greedy! think Edward! Think! oh, never mind i already know just the way'' he returned to the teens ''Hey, that Van belongs to the bank of scottland, there's lots of gold inside!''

Not exactly bright the teens instantly believed the prince and attacked the Van. Since the van belonged to what seemed to be hardened criminals the teens where quickly driven away and chased by the angry kidnappers probably so they could beat them up, something Edward would be much more sympathetic to if those guys hadn't just robbed him.

As the criminals ran after the teens Edward sneaked towards the van ''Heh, those morons left the door open!'' he smilled as he opened the side door.

''Mppphhh! hhmppphh! hmpphhhh!'' the first thing Edward saw was Thomas taped to the chair and gagged who started muffling very happily.

''Shut up kid!'' One of the men yelled from the drivers seat. Apperently the men where smarter then Edward thought and hadn't all left the Van. Luckily the guy didn't look in his front mirror and so completely missed the prince.

''Oh, dear god your an idiot!'' Edward whispered ''He could have spotted me!'' To be safe Edward took his stungun out and shut a small dart at the mans troat, making him fall asleep.

''Mpphwow! gotta mpave thampphh'' Thomas smilled.

''Shut up! C-can't you see the trouble you caused me!'' An angry Edward tore the tape from Thomas his mouth.

''Aaaaaaaaah! Well i can't 'elp it your so trusty!'' Thomas yelled ''now hurry up and free me before thos morrons get back!''

''You really don't deserve my help you know'' Edward said as he undid the tape ''There you out! now follow me back to the hotel so you can pay for what you did!''

''Hahahaha thats a laugh! i'l just show ya your....okay, fine but only because you saved me'' Thinking saving him was mightily nice Thomas found the prince deserved to see him get punished for his actions ''Just don't let them fire me!''

''Wow i thought you would punch me to be honest'' Edward smilled ''No lets go!''

As soon as the boys left the van however they where mett with a distressing sight, the returning criminals

''Crap! their escaping!'' The criminals yelled out.

''Crap! their back!'' the boys yelled out :big:

The prince and the pauper quickly tried to run past them but Edward was grabbed by two men while a third one quickly pushed a cloth on his mouth.

''mppphhhh!...n-nhmp...mm-mmmmhph...mmm.....m'' Crap! what the hell wat this! The prince could feel himself blacking out ''Hehe now we got our real prize'' One of the man gloated.

The pauper on the other hand had suceeded in running past them ''Damm....i aint be going soft i hope'' For some reason unknown even to him Thomas ran back ''Let the prince go ya freaks!'' Thomas ran back and tackled both the two holding him and the one holding the cloth.

''Come on! prince! time to go! time to go! PRINCE!'' Thomas yelled as he saw Edward fell to the ground and wasn't standing up ''Ah, damm that crap already worked didn' it!'' He yelled annoyed. The men on the other hand did stand up with one of them grabbing him.

''Aaaaaahhh! l-lemme go! n-not again!'' Thomas kicked and screamed ''Any chance you'l be lettin' me go? i-i aint got no use now ya got the real deal after all''

''There you are wrong kiddo'' One of them smilled as he pushed the cloth on his face as well.

''MMPPPHHHmmpphhh..mmpphhh..mph...mph'' To his horror Thomas felt himself getting weaker ''Mmpphh...NOMPPPHHHH!......mpphh...m'' untill he too lost consciousness.

The prince and the pauper had both been captured.

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby Sacrificiallove » Tue Nov 27, 2012 10:25 am

Two captured dudes in distress....I am very much enjoying this story. I will say, though, you need to proofread, but other than that, I like the idea.

Just because I am a wishful thinker, I'd like to see a woman save these two boys, but it's your story and I'm assuming you probably won't like that idea, but I thought I'd try.

Re: The prince and the pauper

Postby TUfriend » Sun Dec 02, 2012 9:49 am

Another great story from you, Chris. I have to think you're about my age too.
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