Deleted.

Postby Male shortstied » Wed Aug 12, 2009 4:28 pm

This story has been deleted because I'm not going to finish it.
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Re: The International abduction

Postby Fesselfan » Thu Aug 13, 2009 2:58 am

Looks promising.
Just some minor points: you might want to use a spellchecker (either word processor or browser plugin). That saves a lot of the distrating typos ;-)

Cheers

FF
There are 10 kind of people in the world.
Those who understand binary numeral system, and those who don't.

Re: The International abduction

Postby Male shortstied » Wed Sep 02, 2009 8:46 pm

look above for reason of deletion.
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Re: The International abduction

Postby chloroformmeplease » Wed Sep 02, 2009 10:27 pm

You wrote these words " it’s simple your kidnapping you for the week until " it makes no sense whatsoever. How can you kidnap youself? A heads up on grammar also. You're meaning you are is spelled you're not your. It is a a totally different word that means a totally different thing.
Your story is hard to follow also. And would be nicer than & when writing a story. Just thought I'd give you a few pointers.
Treat others as you wish to be treated. Having said that I will not sit idly by while someone is disrespecting another just because they think they are better than everyone else.