Postby Jay Candice » Sat Aug 11, 2012 1:19 pm
Well written, but it would be nice to use quotation marks to emphasize your dialogue. It was a little annoying to read that way. It was a good story, very short and descriptive. Thanks.
In the end, it matters not how many breaths you took, but how many took your breath away.
-shing xiong
We are not retreating, we are advancing in another direction
-General Douglas MacArthur
Fall down seven times, stand up eight
-Japanese Proverb