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Postby Anonymous_Turtle » Tue Oct 21, 2014 4:28 pm

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Re: Mom and I were captured burglars

Postby Anonymous_Turtle » Tue Oct 21, 2014 4:29 pm

This is the 3rd and final part
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Re: Mom and I were captured burglars

Postby OverLooker » Sun Oct 11, 2015 3:07 pm

Just finished your three part tale and i liked it although it could have done with more details and descriptions and be overall longer. There were also some spelling and grammar issues and well as a plot hole or two. I did like the story though.
I dont wanna come off as mean im just trying to help with your storytelling.
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