After School (F/F)

Postby linkedin » Sun May 23, 2010 6:11 am

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Re: After School (F/F)

Postby linkedin » Sun May 23, 2010 6:12 am

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Re: After School (F/F)

Postby Jason Toddman » Sun May 23, 2010 7:56 am

You say strictly speaking this ISN'T a tie-up game? :big: Well, if not - it's close enough for ME! :tied:
Do please continue this story!!! :D :D :D :D :D
Dare to be different... and make a difference.
To boldly go where no one in their right mind has gone before...

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby linkedin » Sun May 23, 2010 12:54 pm

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Re: After School (F/F)

Postby BlackWingedAngel » Sun May 23, 2010 1:29 pm

VERY Intriguing! Can't wait to see more
I'm a girl
I want to be the submissive victim

I am such a total bondage newb

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby chloroformmeplease » Sat May 29, 2010 5:49 am

I like it too,please continue.
Treat others as you wish to be treated. Having said that I will not sit idly by while someone is disrespecting another just because they think they are better than everyone else.

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby capturedsuperhero » Sat May 29, 2010 6:06 am

Brilliant this is a great story.

Two females, my favourite!

And also I much prefer "kidnap" stories to TUGs, I'm a sucker for drama!

You're a good writer, good descriptions without too much repetition. And you aren't rushing things which is always good.
Arrogant Superhero here, Looking for a Nasty Villain!!!!

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby linkedin » Sun May 30, 2010 3:50 am

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Re: After School (F/F)

Postby odin17 » Sun May 30, 2010 4:22 am

Wow, great job. this is an amazing story. you should definately continue the story. you kinda left a cliff hanger there. i would love for you to keep writing plz xD. great job.

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby linkedin » Sun May 30, 2010 5:11 am

Yeah i must admit it is a bit of a cliff hanger there sorry =/ i do actually have some ideas on how to continue it however i am really busy with exams at the moment so i wouldnt hold your breath for another part anytime soon though.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story though :) just put this to the back of your mind and then maybe sometime in the future i may surprise you with another part.

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby Jason Toddman » Sun May 30, 2010 5:55 am

Yes, it's a great beginning. There's still so much more you can do with this story, too. When you can, definitely please continue!
Dare to be different... and make a difference.
To boldly go where no one in their right mind has gone before...

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby capturedsuperhero » Tue Jun 01, 2010 3:24 pm

terrific story.

i agree something more "final" is needed.

you could elaborate on:
how lucy is going to stop Ashley telling on her?
what lucy is going to do to further "punish" ashley?

i'll say it again, I like your writing style, i like the story and the characters, and your descriptive writing is clear.
Arrogant Superhero here, Looking for a Nasty Villain!!!!

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby dex » Wed Jun 02, 2010 2:52 am

i agree with all tohs above, you need to finish it, but take your time, it is a brilliant story
Being bisexual is the worst of any world because you don't really belong anywhere, because you are never sure of yourself or those around you. You can't trust in anyone, their motives or their intentions. And because of that, you have no true identity.

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby SamanthaBoundx » Thu Jun 03, 2010 4:30 am

Thi is the first story Ive read on here - and things are off to a good start! Really enjoyable - cant wait to hear the rest of it!

Re: After School (F/F)

Postby Nicole » Thu Jun 03, 2010 8:07 pm

man, this is one heck of an awesome story. its too good to end there. i agree with everyone else, plz continue. :)
ill be waiting.