First, let me start by describing all the charectors and the setting.
Jennifer: Black hair, tall, strong
Ashley: Blonde, average height, not as strong as her sister.
Jennifer was going to surprise her mom and her sister by coming home from college for two weeks. When she got to the house, nobody was there. She had forgotten that her sister had summer school until three and her mom had work until six thirty. It was only noon. She had three hours to herself. There wasn't anything interesting on T.V., so she decided to go through her sisters room to see if there was anything she could do. She discovered that the room was a mess, so she started cleaning it up.
While making Ashley's bed, she saw a notebook/diary sticking out from under the matteress. She opened it, and found pictures of people with their hands tied and tape or something that looked like tape over their mouths. She got a really good idea. Her sister and mother didn't know that she was coming, so what if she held them hostage for a couple days, after all, it was Friday, and nothing ever happened on the weekend. She decided she was going to do it.
She went into her moms room to find some black clothes. She found black jogging pants, but the only black top she found was a sweater with a thick fur hood. Also in her mom's closet she found four fur coats and a couple pairs of fur mittens. Her mother never told her that she loved fur so much. Maybe it was supposed to be a secret, but it wasn't anymore.
Next, she went to the garage to find materials to tie and gag her sister. She enough rope to tie up an elephant, and enough duct tape to silence one. She brought that all into the house. She decided how she was going to execute the "kidnapping." She was going to hide in the closet by the door until Ashley came in, then she would grab her and start tying her. She hid in the closet for about 5 minutes until she heard the door open. When her sister walked by her, she grabbed her and threw her hand around her mouth, eliminating any chance of yelling for help. She took a piece of tape and shoved it over her sister's mouth.
"Now you do what i say, or you will be punished."
Is this good? Should I continue?