When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby KamJM » Sun Sep 29, 2013 8:22 am

This is only my second story to date. I hope you guys won't mind if it isn't up to scratch.

It begins at a secondary school, or high school of you would prefer. Brief intro:
Me: Danny, 16 (few months to 17th birthday), short and skinny, 5 ft 3'
Jack: Just past 17th birthday, 5 ft 7' moderate height for his age, average build, rich family
Yoong: Also just past 17th birthday, ,athletic, talkative , 5 ft 5'
Ivan: 17 in a few months, athletic, 5 ft 6'

It all started with Jack's family. Money always attract trouble, and one day Jack finds himself in the back of a van with his friends in a very hostile environment......

[2.25 pm - Outside school]
"Hey, wait up!" I said, me and Ivan catching up with Jack and Yoong. We were walking down a neighborhood that will eventually lead us to a bus stop. jack, being a modest boy, doesn't bother with having his own transport. He prefers to be with the crowd. "What's taking you guys so long?" "Tell the teacher that, with her lecture and whatnot"
We were so busy chatting away that we didn't notice a van following us for quite some time. It is a green van, without windows and small in size. The type you would find delivering goods/food. The neighborhood was so deserted by now as most students has cleared away. School ended at 2, and most staying here prefers to close their doors shut at this hour to avoid the so-called "ruffian" students.
Woosh. "Hey what the...? Don't ya know how to drive?" the van was right in front of us. Bang, the back doors open and people wearing ...ultraman masks came out. One, two, three, four. Each of them grabbed us before we had time to react - covering up our mouths and pushing us into the back of the van. "Go, go, go!" The van started moving. I and Jack, closer to the van door, wanted to kick it open now that they loosened their grips on us, when a glimmering sharp object appeared. Two, actually. One for both of us.
"Listen to us and all will be well." commanded one of them, "or else...."
The four of us nodded in defeat. They produced rope and tied our hands behind our backs, palm to palm, and even passing the rope under our school belt (part of the uniform) so we can't lift our arms. Next they tied our legs, from the ankles to thighs, so tight that my legs started to feel numb. They proceeded to slice mine, Jack and Ivan's white school shirt and pull them off, leaving us bare chested in our school shorts, and cut out a slice of the shirt, stuffing it into our mouths and wrapped the rest around our head, gagging us.
I nearly puked at that moment. My shirt was sweaty from my run to chase up with Jack and Yoong earlier, and now I'm forced to suck my own sweat. Ivan is suffering too from his looks, although Jack seems luckier.
Two of the kidnappers then pulled Yoong towards them and tied the rops tying his legs to the leg of the seat, keeping him in place.
"We won't hurt YOU, but if you don't cooperate, your FRIENDS will suffer. More than some of them are now, of course," said one of the man, laughing at his own joke.
What do they want with him? Jack's the rich kid, not Yoong. So...?

TBC? What do you guys think?

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby mikeybound » Sun Sep 29, 2013 7:44 pm

I think it's fun! Brings me back to the days of the GiD site.

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby KamJM » Tue Oct 01, 2013 2:16 am

GiD? What's that? Forgive me but I really have no idea...
Anyways, before the story continues:

[2.35pm - Over the phone]
"Mission accomplished. We got them, sir"
"You sure you got ALL FOUR?"
"That's right, sir"
"Good. Let's see what you can do..."

TBC

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby kidnapplz » Tue Oct 01, 2013 3:05 am

Love it Plz go on.

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby xtc » Tue Oct 01, 2013 3:46 am

KamJM wrote:GiD? What's that? Forgive me but I really have no idea...

GiD = Guys in Distress.
Boxer shorts are cool,
but little speedos rule!

More by the same author: viewtopic.php?f=5&t=22729

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby KamJM » Sun Oct 06, 2013 12:19 am

ok here we go for part two....hope it's ok

[5.00pm - Somewhere in the Countryside]
I dozed off as the van went on and on and on. Being cramped with three buddies and four kidnappers in the back of a van isn't exactly comfortable. In fact, it's starting to get warm and I'm sweating again. Hot enough for me to fall asleep in my tied position.

Bang! The van came to a sudden stop, jerking me forward, and awake. The four captors wasted no time in carrying me, Jack and Yoong down from the van and toss us into some sort of small storage hut beside a farmhouse. It was empty except for dust. And it smells, too. It was small that the three of us were almost put on top of each other. The slammed and locked the door. Our sweaty tied bodies start to stick against each other, and the smell of our sweat combined with the initial smell of dust made the place very, very unbearable. We were put on our stomachs, with me in the middle, Jack on my left and Ivan on the right. Each of their bodies landed on half of my body on top of me. With my hands already tied behind my back and two bodies pressing on me, there wasn't much I could do. I couldn't even budge!
Surprisingly, Ivan and Jack hasn't even stirred....something's off, I can sense it. They were still tied with their hands behind them and legs tied together, but no matter how much i shake and push, they just won't respond.... They are not dead since they're still sweating, sticky and warm, but other than that....

Back in the van, the driver was slowly untying Yoong from the seat, being careful not to remove the bonds tying his hands and legs together. He added more lengths of rope to strengthen the initial ties. That done, he carried Yoong out of the van. Yoong stirred - and find himself in a cold room (which was actually the farmhouse). He looked around and found that the wall is silvery white, and full of machines like a laboratory. But those machines aren't for chemicals, they look like they're meant for humans. The devices made the place look like a torture chamber. There were chains from the ceilings and ground. There was also a small area where lots of rope can be seen. There was also a large chair/bed (I dunno what it's called) like the ones in a dentist's office, only bigger. With straps. And the driver was going to put him onto it. Yoong panicked and started squirming and shaking, anything to get away. He fell from the man's arms right onto the ground on his left side, sending a jolt of pain through him, stunning him for a few moments. He took the chance and lifted Yoong, strapped Yoong's feet, waist and forehead to the chair, with his feet still tied together. The driver untied Yoong's hands and Yoong slapped him in the face. The man got mad, pushing Yoong's arms down to both sides of the chair. By then, the other four men returned, and helped strap Yoong's hands to the sides of the chair.
And the began to cut off Yoong's shirt and school shorts, leaving him in his underwear of blue bekini briefs. They strapped some wires with detectors onto him and attached the other end to a monitor.
"Let the evaluation begin..."


TBC. Comments please! How was this?

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby KamJM » Sun Oct 06, 2013 12:20 am

xtc wrote:
KamJM wrote:GiD? What's that? Forgive me but I really have no idea...

GiD = Guys in Distress.


I see. Thanks.

Re: When A Mistakes turns Tragedy - For the Victims

Postby mikeybound » Sun Oct 06, 2013 7:24 am

Why aren't the guys moving, what're these evaluations, and what's the mistake?