Fun with Beanie part 1

Postby Andrew » Mon Jan 28, 2008 5:39 pm

Today is a normal day in the life of Jenelle Bean a.k.a Beanie. She is a Jr in S High. She is 15 and verry cute. She plays claranet in band and runs track. Her best friends are Christean also 16 and Allison aka alli also 16. When she was younger she and her friends played tugs but no one knew that. And in their spare time they also snoop around. But today will not be a normal day for her, she would snoop to much.

"So did you hear about the robbery at the bank?" asked Allie to Beanie. "Yeah I did, there is this old house that I saw people in that I'm going to look at." Beanie replied. Beanie was wearing a blue sweat-suit, and sneakers.
So after school Beanie went to check out that house she told Allie about. So she sneaks around the house and looks in a window to see what she could see, and what she sees is a bed full of cash. She turns to run to tell the cops what she saw. But before she dose, she is grabbed from behind and a cloth with a sweet smeling substance coming from it. She tries to fight it but it's no good. Before long she is knocked out cold.

She comes too, she tries to move but she soon noticed that she is tied to a chair. Her hands are tied to the back of the chair, her feet are tied to the legs of the chair. Ropes are tied around above and below her breasts, her knees are tied togeather but her feet are tied apart. She tries to yell but all that comes out is "MMMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPPPPPHHHHHHHH" She is gagged with a sock or a cloth or something and there is duct tape wrapped around her head like 6 or 7 times. She looks down and sees that her shoes have been taken off and so its her socked feet out there.

END OF PART 1
Will like feed back as this being my first post of a story ever.



Should I add Allie or Christen?
Last edited by Andrew on Wed Jan 30, 2008 10:18 pm, edited 2 times in total.

PART 2

Postby Andrew » Mon Jan 28, 2008 8:08 pm

PART 2 BEANIE MEETS THE ROBBERS

"MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPPPPPPHHHHHHHHHHH" She shouts as loud as she can but thats not much. She fights the ropes with all her might, but they don't budge an inch. She looks around the place where she is being held captive and sees nothing. "Must be a basement or something" she thinks to herself. It's pitch black where she is. All of a sudden a light turns on her eyes so that she can't see any thing. And her thought was right by the sound of foot steps walking down stairs.
"Well well well well, lookie what the snoop draged in Louie, a little girl." A man with a gruff voise said, she cringed at this because yes she was small for her age, she hatted being call little. "Now whats your name little girl?" asked the man with the gruff voise."OH OH OH OH OH I know who she is boss!!!!" said a man with a higher pitched voise then the other, "that there is Jenelle Bean the 'sluth'" She tried with all her might to see the faces but the light was just to to bright.
"Well little Miss. Bean what were you doing looking in our house? Do we look in your house? No, so it is rude to look in other peoples house don't you think. Me and Louie here do. So you know what we are going to have to teach yous some manners." He said as he blindfolds her and after a few flashes of light, which she can only assume were pics of her tied up. They untie her from the chair and pick her up and move her to a bed.
"MMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPPPPHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH"
"MMMMMMMMMEEEETTTTTRTTTRWW"
"MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM"
"GGGGGGOOOOOOOOORMMMMMMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPP"
"I'm sorry Miss. Bean but we can't understand you." the boss said as he and Louie places her down on a bed and ties her spread.
"Louie teach Miss. Bean that it isn't nice to snoop."
"Yous got it boss, the old treatment?"
"Yep"
Old treatment they did this before? What is it?
Her questions met answers when Louie started tickling her very sencative feet. Even with socks on she can't stand to be tickled all. Now or as a kid playing cops and robbers with Nick, Joe, Allie, Christen, And Andrew. Every time she got tied up even by her own teammates she always got tickled and she hatted it.
"NNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPPHHHHHHH"
"PPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEMMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPPSSSSS"
"SSTPPPPPPPPHHHHHHHHHHHHH"
She tries to fight him off, but the ropes don't help and he is tickling her to much.


TBC END OF PART 2

I WANT TO KNOW IF I SHOULD ADD ALLIE OR CHRISTEN TO HER HELL.
LET ME KNOW.
Last edited by Andrew on Wed Jan 30, 2008 10:21 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Part 3 BEANIE GETS A FRIEND

Postby Andrew » Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:37 pm

The boss walks in to the room with all the money, delighted by the squeels of laghter by his bound and gagged captive behind him. He sits down to count the money but he hears a sound out side. He starts to count the money and hears the noise again. "If you want to see her alive again you will come in and give your self up now." The boss says.
"Darn how did he know I was here. I was to loud." Thinks Alli. She is dressed in her black band sweatshirt, her best pair of jeans, and black van's sneakers and white socks. She had to obey or they will kill her best friend.
As Alli walks around the boss puts on his mask and gets the chlorforme. Just as she walks in, he gets behind her and presses the sweet smelling rag to her mouth and nose. Before long she was out cold and Louie who is giving Beanie a little rest after a half hour of tickling. "Who do wes gots heres boss?" Asked Louie
" Oh just another snoop. Take her sneakers and add them to the rest. I'll take care of her."
"Right boss."
When all of this was going on, Beanie drenched in sweat tries to get out of the ropes and get free. She was able to work the blindfold off so she could now see that she was in a bed room and there are no windows. She sees a chair in the middle of the room and a bed right next to hers and the bed she was tied to had big poles on the posts. The door opens and she sees who she guess is the boss.
"Well Miss. Bean you can see can you? Good cause I got a suprize for you." He said with an evil grin.
Suprize what could that be, are they letting her go? She soon found out what it was. And she got a new strength in her but it was no use.
"AAAAALLLLLLLLIIIIMMMMMMMMMMMMPPP"
"LLLLLLEETMMMMMMMPPPPPPP"
"HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMPPPPPPPPPPPHHHHHHH"
"GGGGGGGGGGMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPPPPPP"
"Oh so this is your friend is it? Well she is now your room mate as well. I caught her like I did you SNOOPING."
He tied Alli like Beanie, spread, but this time it was diffrent, the knots. He tied the knots in a slip knot with her so when Alli woke up and fought the ropes they would only get tighter. And as he gagged Alli he gagged her with a rolled up sock and stuffed it in her mouth and like Beanie wrapped duct tape around Allies head 6 times.
As he was doing this Louie came in with a camra.
"It's done boss you want me to take pictures of her and Bean? And whats her name any way?"
"Yes I do, I want Mr. D to know what we have done. And i found her school I.D. on her it says that her name is Allison Mars, so Louie when Miss. Mars wakes up do the treatment to her. But before you do and she dose do it again to Miss. Bean and record it as well."
"Yous got it boss. Oh boy this will be fun."
"NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPPPHPHHHHH"
"PPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSMMMMMP"
Beanie pleads as Louie starts to tickle her again.
And the boss gose back to the money.


END OF PART 3.
Let me know what you think.
Next Part stuff will happen.
Thanks Andrew

PART 4 THE END

Postby Andrew » Tue Jan 29, 2008 6:30 pm

THIS IS THE END OF MY FIRST STORY FUN WITH BEANIE

Alli just started to wake up to the MPHS of Beanies laughter. She saw that she was tied up and that Beanie was tied and being tickled.
"BBBBBBBEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMMMNPPPPPPPPPP"
Alli said
"AAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLIPPPPPPPPPPPH"
Replied Beanie
"Hey boss the other girl is up." Called Louie to the boss in the other room who was counting the money they got from the bank job.
"Well hello Miss. Mars welcome to our humble abode. I hope you slept well your going to need it. Louie you know what to do"
"Right boss."
As he goes up to tickle Alli they hear the cops coming and so they have to improvise.
"Louie get the ice and bring it in here, I'll go get the car and the money, I suppose you know what to do with the ice?"
"Errrrrrr right boss. hehehehehehehe"
"Good now hurry"
They both leave and take the camra with them. In a little while Louie comes back with a tray of ice. He takes the girls socks off and puts 2 ice cubes in each one of them, then put the ice filled socks back on the girls feet. This makes them go crazy, Louie then puts the rest down their shirts.
"Louie we go to go now, as for you Miss. Bean and Miss. Mars we shall meet again. I'm sure of that."
They both leave, leaving the girls to freeze and fight the ropes and ice but its no good.
In about Five mins the cops come in and untie the young girls.
"Are you ok Beanie?" Asked Alli.
"Yeah I can handle it what about you Alli?"
"I'm fine, hey officer did you get the men who did this to us and robbed the bank?"
"No sorry, but we will keep looking after all they got away with $2,000,000"
"And our sneakers" Added Beanie.

The End
What did they mean that they would meet again?
Will our 2 sluths ever find out who the boss is and get Louie back?
So much to come. Look for the next Story of Beanie the sluth.




P.S. Will like feed back.
Andrew

Poll

Postby Andrew » Tue Jan 29, 2008 6:51 pm

I'm polling how you all like or dis liked it
its here
http://www.tieupgames.net/viewtopic.php?p=455#455

Postby Andrew » Mon Mar 10, 2008 6:38 pm

thank you for your feed back. May i ask where? In your eyes that is.

Postby Fesselfan » Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:23 am

You switch times i.e. here:

All of a sudden a light turns on her eyes so that she can't see any thing. [...]She tried with all her might to see the faces but the light was just to to bright


On part of several spelling mistakes, please choose a auto correcting program of your choice, and put the text into it (MS Word for example). Trust me- this helps improving basic grammar a lot!

Please take this as constructive critic- I know myself how hard it is to write in correct language, especially if it's not your mother's tounge. Still, it makes them much better to read.


Cheers
FF
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Those who understand binary numeral system, and those who don't.

Postby Andrew » Tue Mar 11, 2008 11:51 am

I will. This is what I was "fishing" for. Any thing you say I will take in good heart.