Postby OverLooker » Sun Oct 11, 2015 3:07 pm
Just finished your three part tale and i liked it although it could have done with more details and descriptions and be overall longer. There were also some spelling and grammar issues and well as a plot hole or two. I did like the story though.
I dont wanna come off as mean im just trying to help with your storytelling.
"Mmmmppphhhhhhh"