Mmmph....mmph... Good

Postby Chase Ricks » Fri Oct 22, 2010 3:00 pm

Welcome to the site. Good story but I think you meant to say Chris instead of typing Cyrus.
From whence I came and whence I went heaven said I was too evil and sent me to hell. Demons and devils succeeded in breaking my soul.

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Re: Mmmph....mmph... Good

Postby Three » Wed Oct 27, 2010 8:16 am

It's tough writing your first story - not knowing if people like it or what to expect. It's a good start, don't give it up - just finish what you started and then start again improving it. And you should maybe read it once after writing it, give it an hour and look again - always a surprise. But good job and please, please finish it! :D

Re: Mmmph....mmph... Good

Postby xtc » Wed Oct 27, 2010 8:52 am

Thanks for posting.
I agree with Three. However, I've found that, if I leave only an hour between drafting and posting, I don't stand a chance of spotting all my mistakes!
I look forward to reading more of your work.

xtc
Boxer shorts are cool,
but little speedos rule!

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Re: Mmmph....mmph... Good

Postby Jason Toddman » Wed Oct 27, 2010 10:59 am

Well, don't take *too* long checking over your next installment either!!! 8)
Looking forward to reading more of this story.
Clever title too by the way. :big:
Dare to be different... and make a difference.
To boldly go where no one in their right mind has gone before...