Nightly event

Postby FelixSH » Sun Jul 07, 2013 11:45 am

Hi, I wrote something. It´s a fantasy I had while taking a walk. The writing style is a bit of an experiment, I hope it is ok to read.

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There is a clear summernight sky above me, as I walk through the park. Like every night during summer I take a walk, enjoying the warm temperature and the mild breezes. It´s a joy to walk here, at this time, seeing no one around me. As much as I prefer the city to the country, I miss the feeling of being completely alone somewhere, like it is possible in the small town I came from.
Sounds reach me, as I get near to a playground. It´s only a small one, though a cemented soccerfield is attached. I move my head in the direction of the sound, recognizing it as laughter. A handful of teenagers seems to have fun, sitting around and joking, enjoying not to have to get up early next morning.
Smiling, I move on. It isn´t the first time that I saw them there, so I don´t give it much of a second thought. Suddenly I hear them calling someone. “Hey, wait. Come here.” Guessing they are talking to someone else, I keep going, ignoring them. Hearing them again, seconds later, louder this time, I look in their direction again. The whole group started to come into my direction.
I stop, feeling somewhat uneasy. Maybe I should run? But then, this is a safe neighborhood, there is probably nothing to fear. Their smiling faces seem to indicate the same.
“Hey, what´s up?”, one of them says. Maybe he is their leader? His friends, four other guys, are staying behind him. They are to far away to make out details, except for the one who talked to me. Tall and skinny build, spiky, short hair. A poloshirt and some checkered shorts, the lousy light at least tells me that.
“A nice night, isn´t it?”, I answer, waiting curiously for something to happen. As I get no further reaction, I continue. “Can I help you?”
This time, I get an answer. “Yes, actually. Our problem is there, at the trees”, he says, pointing in the direction from where he came. The situation continues to make me nervous. “I should better get home, you know. It´s pretty late already.”
His smile changes into a grin, as he says: “No, really, you should come. We really need your help.” The other guys circle me while he talks. There is something wrong here.
I try to break out, but two of them stop my attempt, both holding one of my arms. I try to scream, but a third one handgags me. I try to fight back, but there is nothing I can do. Being not particularly strong, it is easy for them to hold me, and every sound I make is caught in the gagging hand.
After some time I stop resisting, and we move to the place where the group came from. As we move closer, I can make out a person I didn´t notice before. He looks like a teenager, of equal age to the rest of the group. Rope ties his body to one of the trees. The leader and another guy free him. Happily he grins at me.
I struggle again, but can´t get free. The hand is removed from my face, but some sort of cloth is pushed into my mouth as I try to say something. Tape gets wrapped around my head, rendering me speechless.
My hand get tied behind the tree, my body tied to it. I try to move, to escape, but it is useless. I try to reach the knots with my fingers, but I can´t find a single one. After some time, while the teenagers joke around, I surrender, hoping for them to free me.

Nothing happens for some time, except for them talking. Finally they start moving, but not in my direction. I try to say something, though only muffled sounds come out. Suddenly, the leader turns around and looks at me. “Have fun”, he says, before he continues to walk away.
I shake my head, not believing what had happened. I struggle, but to no avail. I scream, but no one can hear me.
Finally, I give up. There is no way to go. I try to move my hands, but they are stuck. Tries to open my mouth fail, the tape is too strong. So I give up.
I´m not afraid. It is a warm night, so I will not freeze. The playground is well visited during the day, so someone will find me. And I am alone. I am in the shadow of the tree, not illuminated by the lanterns. There is no way for anyone to find me during this night. So there is nothing for me to do.

I start to relax. The ropes hold me. I feel the mild breeze. I enjoy the silence and the few stars that I can see. There is nothing for me to do then to wait. I am at peace.

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Feedback is, of course, appreciated.

Re: Nightly event

Postby kc1636 » Sun Jul 07, 2013 2:43 pm

Nice!

Re: Nightly event

Postby bondagefreak » Mon Jul 08, 2013 7:22 pm

Another well written story from you.
Short and light, perfect. The writing style is very good...first person views often give stories a more realistic touch since you are seeing the story through the eyes of a single individual instead of some anonymous all-seeing narrator. Feelings and thoughts have been very well conveyed and the descriptions you have provided, allow for a clear portrait of the landscape and surroundings.
Well done. I look forward to more work from you :odd:
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