An easy start.

Postby Jeffrey1225 » Sat Mar 01, 2014 6:14 pm

Ok this is my first post so ill go into detail about my writing style before I get to the story. If you see Italics (parentheses) *stars* or something of the like im showing imigry or what the main charachter is seeing or general depth-adding things kinda like the directions in a play. I also can write really dark at times and not realize it but ill make you wait and see that later :quirk:.

Ill start off describing the characters. Rachel one of the 1-5 diffrent main characters, Is blondish brown medium lengthed hair, decently athletic but not over the top. Rachel's personality is a bit quirky/kinkey a large direct but also inderict sense of humor. Shes elegant in a way that she wants to look good, but isn't obsessed with it. She also can be annoying but in a funny way the :roll: but while kidding with you. She also is very.. umm controling no nnoooo.... that's not the word... commanding? no well she is very authoritive she makes her point CLEAR and is famously athiest take that how you will.

Jeffrey: Rachel's Husband and leader of Sileo. A very classy but also in the front kind of guy.He has a similar sense of humor to Rachel. He has blackish/brow medium lengthed hair (for a guy), less athletic then Rachel but still fit.

Kaylee: Rachel's unofficial adopted sister i suppose you could call it. There really just good friends and i mean GOOD friends. She is blond with lengthy hair. Quite small but she has a big picture about herself. (more reveiled later :quirk: im very secretive arent I?)

More will be reveiled later in my writing.



PART I

The beginning


"Oi Rachel what took you so long?":J

"Kill it with the accent Jeffrey...":R

"...Whats up?":J

"Nothing....":R

"Tell me....":J

"Please just lea" "Rachel... Tell me whats going on .... Now"
She puts her shopping bags down facing away from me and when she turns back around her face is covered in tears and is weeping more then an angel (did I mention I REALLY like Dr. Who?)She runs to me and I catch her midway. As I comfort her she takes a not out of her back pocket and hands it to me.

The Letter:

Dear Rachel
I'm so sorry to inform you that your
brother was recently killed in an exploding
vehicle set of by a landmine. The United
States Military sends its highest apology
and in the envolope that this came with
was the insurance money(idk what its
called XD)

Our highest apologies,
Captain Adam T. Wildeker


"Oh.. Dear..."
She continues weeping she mumbles something but its in-audible


End of part one
More tommorow im f****n' nackered
Last edited by Jeffrey1225 on Sun Mar 02, 2014 9:16 am, edited 1 time in total.
"If you steal a car the original is lost but if you copy a game there are simply more in the world"~Notch

Re: An easy start.

Postby Jeffrey1225 » Sat Mar 01, 2014 8:27 pm

Ok insamnia decided i cant sleep so here comes

Also Rachel and Jeffrey are married later surrently they have been dating for about 6 years and rachel has moved in with Jeffrey after her mom went to live with her grandmother who upon retiring moved to Scotland.She moved in with Jeffrey fort love out of him and escape from an abuseive stepfather.

Part 2

Perspective set to 1st --Jeffrey--

Rachel lies on the couch still trying to contemplate what has just happened.
"Is there anything i can do to ummm make you feel better or.. cheer you up?"
"mabey.....Jeffrey""Yeah""You ever thought of trying new things?""Well im not against change but what do you have in mind?"
"Ill just open up and say...What is your opinion on.. Bondage?" Jeffrey looks quite :o but also looks to make sure he understands what she said
"Well are you into it?" I ask "Yeah kinda....." she says kinda shyly.. "Well then I'm open for buisness!" I exclaim
"Excuse me?" she asks "I'm saying i have a passion for it too and i'm willing..." She smiles hiding it at first but them revealing it.
"and Rachel you need to follow me or i may have to force you too."


End of part 2!
"If you steal a car the original is lost but if you copy a game there are simply more in the world"~Notch