Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby Jay Feely » Tue Jan 03, 2012 5:56 pm

There is a story in development in the life of Harris Davis, a 17 year old boy who lives in a foster home with 2 other boys around his age. He is not the kind of person who is nice to people, so he is a constant bother to everyone who knows him. He always finds some way to annoy people, whether it’s resetting everyone alarm clocks so it goes off an hour earlier, or stealing things from his roommates. His attitude remains constant even when he is punished by taking away his car privileges or being grounded without television, phone or friends until one day, he would meet his match. He is sitting in his coach on a cold winter day a day after New Year. His big feet are propped up and he is shirtless. Harris Davis is watching television on his favorite program of power rangers, and he is unaware of anyone within his vicinity as his foster brother Daniel creeps up in front of his feet with a strand rope, as he carefully wraps it around his brother ankles and then he tightly secures it in a knot. Then, another one of his brothers, 16 year old Kevin grabs his wrists and restrains them with another piece of rope. The two brothers picks him up, and that is when Harris realizes that he is in trouble, so he struggles to escape and he falls out of his brother’s hands onto the floor, but he is unable to untie himself because he is not good with knots and his foster brothers is skilled due to their role in boy scouts. Their parents were away in a grocery store, and would not return for hours so the boys were left alone with a babysitter who is sleeping upstairs. Daniel and Kevin shove a dirty sock into Harris’s mouth and secure it with several pieces of duct tape. Finally, they use a sleeping mask to blindfold their brother. They carry him, and this time, it goes without a hitch because Harris decided it was futile to struggle.

When they reach the bedroom, they dump him on the bed, and then lock him in the room with bolts they learned how to make with the assistant with the oldest boy in the family, 16 year old Alvin. Harris goes to sleep thinking that his parents would find him and discipline the boys who abducted him and forcibly tied him up, but he is wrong in his thought because a couple of minutes later, the boys return and uses their hands to anchor his legs so it stretches out beyond the front of the bed. They each dig into his sensitive feet with their fingers but to their dismay, he does not laugh because he is not ticklish and despite their efforts, nothing they do could get him to laugh whether it’s using a feather, hairbrush, or electrical toothbrush, so they give up on tickling me. They did, however, found a new way to cause their brother to feel their wrath. They used a bottle of itching powder and dump it inside his underarms, which is a bad spot to have an itch in, and Harris soon is degraded to a pleading boy on the intent on convincing them to wash his armpits so the unbearable itch would stop, but it did not good as they reminded him of all the pranks he pulled on them and stated how revenge is a dish best served cold. Soon, they got bored of causing him itching sensations, and moved to something else.

Daniel and Kevin used a white yarn to restrain Harris cute and adorable toes and that did not allow him to flex them. Then, Daniel slapped his belly until it turned bright pink as tears streamed down Harris face as this was occurring. Kevin completed it by attaching nipple clamps to him and giving his brother a purple nurple. In the end, Harris promised not to pull childish pranks again on his brothers in exchange for having all photographical evidence of his treatment erased. It was going to be a great summer for the rest of their lives.
You will have to subdue me to restrain me. I been a bad boy so make sure you torture me too with anything but pain.

Re: Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby boyscoutjm » Tue Jan 03, 2012 11:21 pm

I like it keep going!!

Re: Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby sarumansauron » Wed Jan 04, 2012 3:49 pm

Greet story! Thanks!
I love TUGS and TICKLING Torture!!!!!

Re: Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby Scottstud94 » Wed Jan 04, 2012 4:29 pm

Honest feedback: This seemed... Rushed. Generally I like your work Jay, but this one lacked detail and inescapable bonds.

Re: Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby Jay Feely » Wed Jan 04, 2012 8:57 pm

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You will have to subdue me to restrain me. I been a bad boy so make sure you torture me too with anything but pain.

Re: Revenge is best served cold (2M/M)

Postby zavulon » Sun Apr 22, 2012 5:02 pm

Not a bad story, but it does seem a little rushed, like Scottstud94 said. You clearly had some nice stuff to work with, but you seemed to write it carelessly. Don't mean to hurt your feelings, just saying that by putting a little more time into your writing, you could make it super awesome