Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Fri Aug 31, 2012 8:23 pm

This story is compeltely fictional. Its my first time, so please bear with me.... Here goes:

Danny (I) : 5’2 , age 16, just your average boy
Yoong : 5’4, also 16, very athletic boy
Ivan: 5’4, 16 as well, also athletic, good friend of Danny

To start off, let me explain that these boys are friends. They are from an all boys school. Now, the story…

I was walking out of the school gate with Ivan. It was 1.30pm, and the day was quite hot, but we were all very happy because it was a Friday, which means we have the weekend off to enjoy. Since I and Ivan stay around the same area, we always wait for the bus together. I was already looking forward to the freedom of the weekends…..

We finally arrived at the bus stop 10 meters away from the school. The bus stop was quite empty since our school dismisses later than most schools on Fridays, and most of our school mates are having cocuricular activities. As we arrive, we witnessed a struggle in a small alleyway. There was a normal white van (nothing special here), and also two people struggling to carry something. That “something” seemed like a body. I and Ivan were stunned for a few seconds. “Should we go check it out?” he asks. “No, let’s go,” I whispered back, “If that’s really a body than it’s a kidnap or murder, it’s too dangerous if they spotted us”

That said, we felt someone giving us a strong push to the back. Both of us went flying on to the cold hard floor. We turned, and saw someone holding a small knife. What’s worse, the knife was pointed at us.

“Get moving,” he commanded. Ivan and I were paralyzed by shock, but the man wasn’t patient. He shoved us forward once more. The two people who just finished loading the body we saw earlier were shocked to hear something drop beside them. “Caught these two sneaking around, take them along,”

“Sure, Jack” They immediately turned us onto stomachs, graphed our schoolbags and tossed them into the nearby rubbish bin. “Hey! We need those!” I yelled. “Oh no, you won’t be needing them after today” the one now known as Jack said. My hands were pulled, wrists crossed and tied to my back. From the feel of it, I believed that I was being tied with wires (And later found that I was right). My legs were tied at the ankles, and also at the thighs. The wire was beginning to cut into my skin. “What do you want with us?” I heard Ivan demand. But his demand was being ignored.

After tying up my wrists, ankles and thighs together, the three of them tossed us into the back of the van. I saw that Ivan was tied up the same way, only with ropes rather than wires. And beside him was the body we saw earlier……tied up in the same way, hands tied behind back, ankles and lower legs tied together, was Yoong. Unlike us, his thighs wasn’t tied, but there was a rope connecting his tied ankles and lower legs to his hands – he was tied in a strict hogtie. The rope connecting his legs to his wrists were passed through under his belt, thus putting him in a strict hogtie – his heels were already touching and pressing down onto his fingers. His back was arched back because of the pressure.

The back of the van was empty, and the two captors came in, while the one known as Jack sat in front as he is the driver. Before we know it, Ivan and I had our school uniform cut open at the buttons and at the arms, and were pulled off our bodies. “Hey! Don’t!” scream Ivan, earning him a slap across the face. Our white school shirts were then used as blindfolds, covering our eyes, blocking out the light. The last thing I saw was Ivan struggling against captor #2.

After my eyes were tightly covered, I felt the van starting to move. As we were brought to whatever place the captors wanted to bring us, several thoughts came across my mind…What do they want with us, especially Yoong? Where are we going? And more importantly…..Will we ever get out of this?

TBC Comments anyone?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby Tied heather » Sat Sep 01, 2012 12:23 am

This is a really good story especially because it's your firt one, and I can't wait to read mote

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Sun Sep 02, 2012 2:27 am

Thanks! Will try to post up the next part within the week.

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby mikeybound » Wed Sep 05, 2012 1:13 pm

Silly kidnappers forgot the gags!

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby bondagefreak » Thu Sep 06, 2012 2:03 am

Hello KamJM
This is a very good first shot at writing a story.
The setting has been laid out well and the potential for good development in the following chapters, is there. You need to write the second chapter.

You left the first chapter wide open to many different possibilities at the end, which is good.
In the following parts, I suggest you develop the main characters more in detail...how they think, how they react...etc

In this first chapter you also provided us with some details about how they were tied up. This is good.
Continue doing this and expand on the details and the descriptions.

As mickeybound points out...we NEED gags ! :big:

Please continue.
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Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Sat Sep 08, 2012 2:01 am

Thanks for the suggestions! I'll try to put them in the parts to come.
In the meantime, enjoy Part 2.
The story is only still expanding..........

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Sat Sep 08, 2012 2:03 am

Part 2:
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With hands and legs bound, not to mention being blindfolded, the three of us lay there helpless. We would have thought of crying out or trashing around to attract attention if not for the knife we saw earlier. As the van drive on, we could do nothing but sit there in the darkness, occasionally jerk around when the van moves/stops suddenly.
After a few hours of driving, the van finally – finally – stopped. The sudden momentum sent us crashing to the front and into each other. I think I must have knocked my head on someone’s feet, judging by the smell of shoes. Our predicament emitted laughs from our captors. I think they must be enjoying our suffering, because really, couldn’t they just hold us in place when the car is about to stop? Seriously!
We heard the door of the van being opened. I felt hands around by chest and waist, and suddenly I was lifted up and put on someone’s back like a sack of potatoes. I felt the person lifting me walk a short distance, heard a door creak, and I was dumped onto the floor. A few minutes later, a thump was heard, and I assumed that one of my fellow captive has been left here as well. The creaking sound of the door was heard, and silence follows.
I laid there for a few more seconds, listening, fearing that they would suddenly come back. When there was no further activity, I immediately started pushing up my blindfold against the floor. It took several tries, but I finally managed to push it up my forehead. It took me a few moments to adjust to the light. It is a farmhouse (or is it a barn house?) with stacks of hay at the corners. Light from the sun is coming in from the windows. And beside me is Ivan – Green pants and white shoes, hands bound at the back with rope, legs tied together, blindfolded with his white uniform. He is just lying there, not even attempting to escape.
I got worried. With my hands tied behind me, I tried crawling over to Ivan. This only caused the wires to cut into my skin even more, and it is starting to hurt, but I didn’t care. I was worried about Ivan. I reached over and tried to push his blindfold with my hands that was tied behind me. How relieved I was when I felt movement. “I’m all right” came his voice.
Finally the blindfold was pushed up. With that gone, I started picking the knots tying Ivan with my back turned. The rope was brittle – it soon broke on itself. Ivan was free. He started releasing me – when we heard noises ad footsteps heading this way. Ivan pulled hard – soon I was free as well. We started running.
But the only way out was the door where the kidnappers were coming in from. We decided to try the element of surprise by tackling them suddenly when they enter. I kicked one of them in the balls when he entered, causing him to double back in pain. Ivan, who was a better athlete, did not have to resort to such tactics. He just tackled the man onto the floor and held him down with his strength. We miscalculated: There were three of them, and there was only two of us – and they had weapons. We were soon overpowered when Jack who was bringing Yoong entered with the knife earlier. Yoong has been tied differently now – his hands was tied behind him at the wrists and elbows, pulling is hands together. His legs were tied together with some kind of stump in the middle – he can’t bend his legs, and is gagged with his hanky and socks. He still had his white school uniform on, but now stained black/grey from the dust. He was dragged over to a pillar and ropes were used to tie him to it. They tied him at the chest ad also at the abs. His face was covered with bruises – and was he crying?
I and Ivan were pushed down on our stomach. My wrists were tied behind me and further length of rope was used to tie my elbows tightly together. This caused my arms to be pulled back further and my chest push out front. I felt my belt being loosened and soon my pants came off, leaving me in my underwear. “That’s for what you did to me,” said the kidnapper I kicked earlier, “thank me that it isn’t more”. I saw Ivan was tied in the same way. Ivan was then tied the same way as Yoong – legs tied with a stump they found outside ad tied to the pillar at the chest and stomach. They tied him to a different pillar, of course. They gagged him with the most convenient object they can find – the dust stained school uniform that was used as a blindfold earlier.
I was pulled up and dragged over to a overhead pole. My captor released my hands and tied them in front of me. He then gagged me with the school uniform earlier – the one stained with dust. I choked but it was reinforced with my own belt. He lifted me up while Jack helped him to hold on to my feet. My captor tied my wrists onto the overhead pole at a full arm stretch while Jack tied my legs to a pillar at about a meter from the ground at the ankles and added loops around my knees and thighs. When they let go, my body sags down due to gravity. When my arms and chest were stretched taut my tied wrists and the stretched arms took my entire body weight. Immediately my hands were starting to feel the pain while my arms and chest were starting to feel sore. With that, they turned and left.
I was left there suspended in midair with my arms supporting my whole weight, Ivan and Yoong tied up pillars. Yoong was still clothed, Ivan was only in his pants and shoes, the shirtless athletic boy’s body covered with sweat and dirt. Yoong’s sobbing can clearly be heard now that the place is quiet. What did they do to him?

TBC Comments or critisms?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby kidnapplz » Sat Sep 08, 2012 6:32 pm

omg LOve it
really a great story. Please go on.

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Fri Sep 14, 2012 9:30 pm

Part 3: (With a small try at different POV, tell me what you guys think!)
My arms and my wrists were burning. The weight of my body is putting a lot of pressure on them in this state. Minutes and seconds pass by slowly – too slowly. I couldn’t take it. I trashed left and right, hoping to somehow loosen them and get out of this misery. But it was futile. As I stop to catch my breath from struggling, I was covered in sweat and my arms and wrists were hurting even more. I screamed into my gag (not a sound was heard though). Tears started to roll down my face. I started sobbing from the intense pain in my arms.

Third Person POV
Ivan was shocked from the second sobbing sound. He knows it is coming from behind him, but he couldn’t turn his head around. He wanted to know what the heck just happened. “They’re doing something to Danny,” he thought. With two of his friends crying, he was agonized. He struggled against his bonds for the first time since he was captured. He used all his strength – pushing, pulling, left, right, front. He just couldn’t sit there with his friends in pain or in trouble.
His efforts were futile, however, and he stopped with his body glistening with sweat. He dosen’t give up – and continue struggling even if he was worn out by now. His limbs were stiff and he was tired…but his friends safety was priority. Push and pull, jerk left, jerk right…..until he passed out from exhaustion.
But that was when the captors returned.

Danny’s POV
I was relieved when I was lowered from the painful state. Tears were still flowing down. I offered no resistance as they made me stand and hobble over. Ivan was being freed, but was he…unconscious? What happened? I wanted to demand answers but I was too weak. The captor that Ivan attacked earlier slapped him – hard – multiple times until Ivan woke because of the pain. Ivan’s face was red from where he got slapped – at both his cheeks.
“Keep them here,” said Jack , “I’ll take this one”. With that he released Yoong and brought him out from the barn house, the sobbing boy offering no resistance. The other two captors made me and Ivan stand face-to-face, and begin tying our tied legs together. They tied our ankles together, then our thighs. Our hands were brought behind the other person…my hands brought behind Ivan and Ivan’s hands behind me. Now they tied our waists together and up onto our chest. This method forced our bodies closer together. I could feel Ivan’s sweat on my skin, and I’m sure it’s true the other way round.
Two shirtless boys , gagged, tied like a two-person cocoon with hands behind each other. But they weren’t done – they pushed us onto the ground with me on top of Ivan, and pull me higher while holding onto Ivan. The ropes binding us became tighter against the force pulling me upwards. They managed to pull me until my eyes, mouth and nose were parallel to Ivan’s. They attached ropes under my armpits and tied them off on a hook on the wall, keeping me in this position. Then they did the unexpected – they removed our gags and used them as blindfolds once more. My saliva from the gag dripped into my eyes and further into my nose, and since our faces were parallel and touching each other, I could also feel Ivan’s saliva (from the gag now used as blindfold) drip on his nose, which also means onto my nose as it is touching.
I also just realized something else as the blindfold was being pulled over my eyes. Our lips would touch if we open our mouth! And with the blindfold on, we wouldn’t move around or we would also accidently kiss each other. “Scream or talk all you want”, said the captor I kicked earlier “No one will hear you, and you may even have the enjoyment of kissing your friend…hahahaha”
They left. Silence continues. We lay unmoving as it would mean kissing each other without meaning to. We also kept our lips together – there was no point screaming and it would also mean kissing each other. This was NOT a situation I would enjoy. Kissing a dream girl would be nice – but not kissing your friend, especially one of the same gender! We were still and silent, and boredom and stiffness set in. An hour or two passed by, and Ivan fell asleep again from exhaustion. Arranging my face as to not accidently kiss Ivan while we were asleep, I passed out as well.

TBC
How's this everyone?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby tiednw » Sun Sep 16, 2012 7:55 am

Awesome story!

Would be even better if the two guys are not only tied together, but also wrapped up in plastic wrap and duct tape! Would love to see that happening in the next part.

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby mikeybound » Sun Sep 16, 2012 7:42 pm

Would've liked it if they kissed.

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby NemesisPrime » Sun Sep 16, 2012 9:47 pm

same here :sadface:
Everyone speaks in multiple languages...But gag talk is universal and a sock in your mouth is the perfect translator!

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Mon Sep 17, 2012 1:36 am

Thanks for the support everyone! Next part will be up within the week.

@Tiednw: Sorry to disappoint you but this is a accidental kidnap situation in the starting. Will try to fit the parts in as the story progress.
@mikeyboud: Erm...wouldn't that put this story into the PG17 section?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby mikeybound » Mon Sep 17, 2012 6:39 am

I know ;)

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Sat Sep 22, 2012 4:10 am

Yoong’s POV
Here they come again. Oh no, Ivan’s unconscious. I hold back my tears as Jack came over, released my body from the pillar with my hands still bound, and led me outside, saying, “Keep them here, I’ll handle this one”. No, no, no, not again!
He led me outside, and then left into a small cottage beside the barn. Memories of what he said before started running through my mind. Am I supposed to betray my family and relatives to save myself? This decision would have been easy to make, if not for the fact that my friends are here too!
He pulled me into the empty cottage. Nothing has changed – a chair, a table, a lamp. He pushed me onto the floor, removed my gag and tied to the chair. My wrists were brought behind the back of the chair, crossed and tied with rope. My legs were then tied to separate legs of the chair, and a further length of rope binds my stomach and chest to the chair, further restricting my movements.
“Shall we begin?”
“Your family’s secrets. From amount of property to every dark secret. Tell me now.”
I remained silent.
“OK!” he yells “If you want this the hard way, then you’ll get what you want!”
He kicks me. The chair drops to the floor. I’m on my back. The weight of the chair and my body presses down on my wrists. It freaking hurts! My eyes start to swell up.
He puts his foot on me, further hurting my wrists and hands. “Tell me!”
“Get off get off get off!”
“No problem!”
He pulls me up, release me from the chair, pushes me onto the floor on my stomach and proceeded to tie my hands behind me, tie my legs together, and bring a rope under my belt, and attach that rope to my tied wrists and ankles. The rope was short. This puts me in a strict (Is this called a hogtie?) as I experienced on the way here. My back was once again arched and my chest trussed forward. My back is starting to ache.
That done, he started kicking me around. He kicked me at my butt, my chest, my arms, and even stepped on my tied wrists. Being trussed around made me sweat, and soon my school uniform was dusty and sweaty. It was now sticking onto me.
“Tell me now”
“Damn you. Never.”
“Fine” he gave me one last kick in the chest. He released me from my hogtie (wrists remain tied) and walked me back to the barn. “Your friends will suffer until you tell me what I want to know”
After leaving me in bruises everywhere, he’s going to hurt my friends!
Walking back to the barn with my hands tied behind me, I begin to add cold sweat to the drenched uniform. Friends? Or family? What should I do now? And what is happening to them while I’m out here?
Hey wait! "
Thats not the barn! Where are you bringing me? Hey!"

TBC Comments anyone?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby kidnapplz » Sat Sep 22, 2012 9:33 am

OMG man. this is amazing. love it. well done

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby Sacrificiallove » Sat Sep 29, 2012 7:43 pm

I love this! A lot! Just remember to keep the verb tenses the same throughout. You switch a lot from past to present. But yeah, I feel bad for these three. If I were you, I'd write in some buff, older teenage girl to come save the day. But that's just me, and that may not be your thing. But whatever you write, I'll read.

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby KamJM » Sat Oct 27, 2012 7:00 am

Sorry guys lost the link to this site....(changed a computer)
Then when I finally...finally got on to the site, thre were error (3 types of it).
Really sorry for leaving the story like this.
Should I continue? Or just start a new one?

Re: Kidnapped Bystander

Postby Grandas » Sun Jan 20, 2013 7:41 am

Please continue! Hehe :big: