Well, even though the content of the story was meant to be harmless, the ages of the kidnapper and the victim weren't exactly appropriate. If you change that, it would probably fix the problem. Even if it's about two friends that happen to be younger, it would still be fine.
I don't recall the story. If you would care to pm me the text, I'll see if I have any suggestions. If, however Zavulon has hit the nail on the head, is it possible for you to act on his advice?
xtc wrote:I don't recall the story. If you would care to pm me the text, I'll see if I have any suggestions. If, however Zavulon has hit the nail on the head, is it possible for you to act on his advice?
I'll change the story to two teenage friends. thank you for your great help