﻿MEIKEI NO LUPERCALIA
CURRENT PATCH - CONSOLIDATED SCRIPT CHANGE LOG
Updated September 25, 2026 (America/New_York)

1. CURRENT VERSION AND COVERAGE

Patch: patch.xp3
SHA-256: 0aaa45a0a08b1eae81e4de9fa8590798d3ebc60de93a7e1bc17e042707113792

This document consolidates the changes documented in the supplied older change
report with all approved translationese and Shakespearean revisions applied today.
Every Current entry was checked against the finished patch. Where a line was
edited more than once, it appears once, with its earliest documented Before text
and the final wording now in the patch. Superseded intermediate wording and
unapplied proposals are not included.

Coverage: the same 93 scenario files as the earlier report. Scenario08-4 remains
excluded and was not altered by today's editing passes.

Current contents of this log:
  - 341 distinct localized edit locations, listed in scenario order.
  - 30 earlier individual corrections carried forward unchanged.
  - 103 applied English-phrasing/translationese edits.
  - 208 applied theatrical-language locations across 25 files (154 edit groups).
  - Retained name-box conventions, with current occurrence counts.
  - All 80 Onii-chan address replacements across 78 entries, with a location index.

One older punctuation entry, scenario09-1.ks line 93, was superseded by T096.
It is merged into the final rewrite. The other 30 earlier individual corrections
are retained. The two approved context corrections are included: T015 concerns
straightforward work rather than a small workload; T030 refers to Nanana's
presence in the family without calling her a literal stranger.

Counts describe different scopes and should not all be added together. Name-box
counts are bulk occurrences; the corrected Hana speaker is also included among
the 341 individual edits. Some address locations also occur in the detailed log.

All file names, labels, and physical line numbers below refer to the current
patch. Dialogue and narration are shown without engine controls, except where
the control itself identifies the correction. Where the older report supplied
only a description or fragment, this log gives the confirmed change and current
line rather than inventing a complete earlier sentence.

2. CURRENT NAME-BOX CONVENTION

Use surnames for characters with distinct surnames, and given names for the
Sewa, Amatsuka, Niounomiya, and Orihara groups. Full names in dialogue and
narration are not shortened by this convention. Generic and performed-role
labels retain their existing function.

Original name                 Current display    Current occurrences
Sewa Tamaki                   Tamaki                           3,979
Sewa Mirai                    Mirai                              452
Amatsuka Mika                 Mika                               169
Amatsuka Reiji                Reiji                               74
Amatsuka Nanana               Nanana                           1,007
Niounomiya Meguri             Meguri                           1,749
Niounomiya Omi                Omi                                119
Orihara Hyouko                Hyouko                             140
Orihara Kyoko                 Kyoko                              466
Shiina Oboro                  Shiina                             396
Tengaku Rairai                Tengaku                            788
Shirasaka Hana                Shirasaka                          324
Tatsuki Yuuen                 Tatsuki                            332
Kurashina Futaba              Kurashina                        1,003
Hakodori Rize                 Hakodori                         1,441
Kakehashi Kohaku              Kakehashi                        1,131

Total: 13,570 current name-box occurrences for these sixteen display names.
This comprises the 13,569 routine substitutions documented previously plus
one additional Shirasaka label from the corrected Hana speaker. Thus Shirasaka
now appears 324 times: 323 routine substitutions and that speaker correction.

3. CURRENT HONORIFIC ADDRESS

Established direct address uses Onii-chan, including the individually identified
lowercase addresses from the older pass. The stammered form is O-Onii-chan.
Ordinary relationship descriptions such as her big brother remain in English.
Existing honorifics and nicknames are retained.

Verified current total: 80 Onii-chan occurrences across 78 entries in the 93-file
scope. Two entries use O-Onii-chan. One entry contains three occurrences.
The location index in section 6 identifies every affected address entry.

4. APPLIED EDITING DIRECTION

English-phrasing pass: natural speech and narration, clearer syntax, preserved
character viewpoint, relationships, ambiguity, and recurring imagery.

Theatrical pass: pronounced Shakespearean diction and cadence for Hamlet and
Philia; a lighter period inflection for Caligula and The Red Chamber. Archaic
pronouns and verb forms follow the addressee. Rehearsals, repeated performances,
and later quotations use matching wording where they repeat the same passage.

Gentle literary recitations retain their simpler voice. Everyday speech stays
conversational. Futaba's deliberately personal maid replies, intentionally bad
draft dialogue, Northern Sea poem variants, and existing omissions are preserved.

5. DETAILED INDIVIDUAL CHANGES

IDs T001-T103 refer to the applied translationese review. H, C, R, P, and L IDs
refer to the approved Shakespearean proposal. Entries marked Earlier report
carry forward the previous changes. The bracketed numbers here are new log
entry numbers, not replacements for those review IDs.


SCENARIO01-1.KS
9 individual edit locations

[001] *label000017 | physical line 183
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C01
Before:  "In a world where no one is innocent, where there is not even a judge, who dares pronounce me guilty?"
Current: "Where none is innocent, where no judge sits, who dares pronounce me guilty?"

[002] *label000018 | physical line 192
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C02
Before:  "How terribly tangled it all seems. And yet it is all so simple."
Current: "How tangled all appears. And yet, how simple."

[003] *label000019 | physical line 199
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C03
Before:  "Had I possessed the moon, had love alone sufficed, all might have been different. But where am I to quench this thirst within my heart?"
Current: "Had I but held the moon, had love sufficed, all might have been otherwise. Yet where shall I quench this thirst within my heart?"

[004] *label000021 | physical line 214
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C14
Before:  "Nothing in this world, nothing in the next, is made for me. Yet I know... and you must know it too."
Current: "Nothing in this world, nor in the next, is made for me. Yet I know... and thou must know it too..."

[005] *label000023 | physical line 227
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C04
Before:  "All I need is the impossible. The impossible! I have sought it to the ends of the earth, in every corner of my soul!"
Current: "The impossible is all I need. The impossible! I have sought it at the ends of the earth, in every corner of my soul!"

[006] *label000024 | physical line 237
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C06
Before:  "I stretched out both my hands. I stretch them out still. Yet all I ever find is you... you, forever standing before me."
Current: "I stretched forth both my hands. I stretch them forth still. Yet all I find is thee. Thee, ever standing before me."

[007] *label000026 | physical line 255
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C08
Before:  "Helicon never returned. We shall bear our guilt forever! This night weighs upon me like the whole of human suffering."
Current: "Helicon hath not returned. We shall bear our guilt forever! This night weighs upon me with all the suffering of mankind."

[008] *label000029 | physical line 278
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C09
Before:  "Into history, Caligula. Back into history."
Current: "Into history, Caligula! Back into history!"

[009] *label000035 | physical line 329
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 1
Before:  --Orihara Hyouko had acted herself to death.
Current: --Orihara Hyouko had died at the end of her performance.


SCENARIO01-2.KS
11 individual edit locations

[010] *label000184 | physical line 72
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T001
Before:  "--A guerrilla performance of Hamlet. I'd like to know at least the outline before we go."
Current: "--A guerrilla performance of Hamlet. I'd like to know the basic plot before we go."

[011] *label000235 | physical line 467
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H13
Before:  "W-what are you doing? I am but wounded!"
Current: "W-what dost thou? I am but wounded!"

[012] *label000236 | physical line 478
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H01
Before:  "You incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Come, drink this poison down! Is this not your own pearl?"
Current: "Thou incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Drink! Drain thine own poison! Is not this pearl thine?"

[013] *label000267 | physical line 706
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H02
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling... are you players with no words to speak? Or mere spectators at some hollow spectacle?"
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling... Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[014] *label000270 | physical line 730
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H05
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me on without a shred of mercy. This freezing agony tells me I am at my end."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied. This icy agony foretells mine end."

[015] *label000272 | physical line 746
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H07
Before:  "Horatio, I am lost. You, at least, must live to tell it... tell all that has befallen us, plainly and truly, to those who do not know...!"
Current: "Horatio, I am lost. Thou must live. To those who know it not, tell all that hath befallen us. Tell it plainly. Tell it true...!"

[016] *label000274 | physical line 760
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H08
Before:  "What are you saying, my lord? There is still wine enough for Horatio."
Current: "What say you, my lord? There is wine enough yet for Horatio."

[017] *label000275 | physical line 769
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H09
Before:  "If you are a man, Horatio, give me the cup! Let go! I beg you, Horatio!"
Current: "If thou art a man, Horatio, give me the cup! Let go! Horatio, I beseech thee!"

[018] *label000277 | physical line 785
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H10
Before:  "If the truth is buried with me, what a wounded name I shall leave behind... If ever you held me in your heart, deny yourself the peace of heaven a little longer..."
Current: "If truth lie buried with me, what a wounded name I leave behind... If ever thou didst hold me dear, forgo the peace of heaven yet awhile..."

[019] *label000278 | physical line 794
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H11
Before:  "Live on! Endure the anguish of this world, and tell them of Hamlet, who pursued an ideal and became a monster! Tell them of this futile thing called vengeance...!"
Current: "Live! Bear thou the anguish of this world, and tell of Hamlet, who pursued his ideal and became a monster! Tell them how vain a thing is vengeance...!"

[020] *label000333 | physical line 1195
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T002
Before:  You struggle with poverty, let tangled relationships unsettle you, and even begin to doubt the acting that matters most.
Current: You struggle with poverty and tangled relationships, and even begin to doubt the acting that matters most to you.


SCENARIO01-4.KS
13 individual edit locations

[021] *label000720 | physical line 479
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T003
Before:  "It's a simple room. Very conducive to concentrating on practice. May I use it from time to time?"
Current: "It's a simple room. Just the place to concentrate on rehearsing. May I use it from time to time?"

[022] *label000804 | physical line 1091
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T004
Before:  "We need to get the troupe to acknowledge us."
Current: "We need to prove ourselves to the troupe."

[023] *label000846 | physical line 1385
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T005
Before:  Knowing the model answer, yet being unable to choose it.
Current: I know the obvious choice, yet I can't bring myself to make it.

[024] *label000872 | physical line 1564
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T006
Before:  A crystal-clear voice hides within the stillness of the night.
Current: From somewhere in the stillness of the night comes a crystal-clear voice.

[025] *label000877 | physical line 1608
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H13
Before:  "W-what are you doing? I am but wounded!"
Current: "W-what dost thou? I am but wounded!"

[026] *label000878 | physical line 1617
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H01
Before:  "You incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Come, drink this poison down! Is this not your own pearl?"
Current: "Thou incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Drink! Drain thine own poison! Is not this pearl thine?"

[027] *label000887 | physical line 1678
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H02
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling... are you players with no words to speak? Or mere spectators at some hollow spectacle?"
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling... Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[028] *label000892 | physical line 1713
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H06
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me on without a shred of mercy."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied."

[029] *label000893 | physical line 1722
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H07
Before:  "Horatio, I am lost. You, at least, must live to tell it... tell all that has befallen us, plainly and truly, to those who do not know...!"
Current: "Horatio, I am lost. Thou must live. To those who know it not, tell all that hath befallen us. Tell it plainly. Tell it true...!"

[030] *label000895 | physical line 1739
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H08
Before:  "What are you saying, my lord? There is still wine enough for Horatio."
Current: "What say you, my lord? There is wine enough yet for Horatio."

[031] *label000896 | physical line 1748
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H09
Before:  "If you are a man, Horatio, give me the cup! Let go! I beg you, Horatio!"
Current: "If thou art a man, Horatio, give me the cup! Let go! Horatio, I beseech thee!"

[032] *label000897 | physical line 1757
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H10
Before:  "If the truth is buried with me, what a wounded name I shall leave behind... If ever you held me in your heart, deny yourself the peace of heaven a little longer..."
Current: "If truth lie buried with me, what a wounded name I leave behind... If ever thou didst hold me dear, forgo the peace of heaven yet awhile..."

[033] *label000898 | physical line 1766
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H11
Before:  "Live on! Endure the anguish of this world, and tell them of Hamlet, who pursued an ideal and became a monster! Tell them of this futile thing called vengeance...!"
Current: "Live! Bear thou the anguish of this world, and tell of Hamlet, who pursued his ideal and became a monster! Tell them how vain a thing is vengeance...!"


SCENARIO01-5.KS
5 individual edit locations

[034] *label000982 | physical line 575
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T007
Before:  "Your ulterior motives are showing. You've got a pickup artist's face."
Current: "Your ulterior motives are showing. You look like you're trying to pick her up."

[035] *label001027 | physical line 962
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H03
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling..."
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling..."

[036] *label001029 | physical line 974
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H04
Before:  "Are you players with no words to speak? Or mere spectators at some hollow spectacle?"
Current: "Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[037] *label001032 | physical line 999
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H06
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me on without a shred of mercy."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied."

[038] *label001133 | physical line 1746
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T008
Before:  "...Well, you being disgusting is nothing new. And I can hardly approach her myself with my social skills. We'll just have to accept this as inevitable."
Current: "...Well, you being disgusting is nothing new. And I can hardly approach her myself with my social skills. I suppose there's nothing we can do about it now."


SCENARIO01-6.KS
1 individual edit locations

[039] *label001338 | physical line 1710
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T009
Before:  "So buying me something gives you permission to make unreasonable demands of my acting?"
Current: "So buying me something gives you permission to make unreasonable demands of me as an actor?"


SCENARIO01-7.KS
1 individual edit locations

[040] *label001504 | physical line 1145
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T010
Before:  That answer comes from a very unexpected direction.
Current: That isn't the answer I expected.


SCENARIO01-8.KS
4 individual edit locations

[041] *label001618 | physical line 15
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R06
Before:  "Worse still... ah, how can I put it? Of late, I have grown utterly tired even of murder's bloody thrills."
Current: "Worse still... how shall I put it? Of late, even the bloody pleasures of murder have begun to weary me."

[042] *label001625 | physical line 75
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R16
Before:  "I ask you, gentlemen, to judge me. Am I mad? Am I what they call a homicidal maniac?"
Current: "Pray judge me, gentlemen. Am I mad? Am I what they call a homicidal maniac?"

[043] *label001648 | physical line 269
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 2
Before:  It wasn't fear, or astonishment, but something made of both.
Current: Not quite fear, not quite astonishment, but something of both.

[044] *label001656 | physical line 329
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T011
Before:  "Kakehashi, what did you think of Futaba's acting? I'd like a comment from her fellow performer."
Current: "Kakehashi, what did you think of Futaba's acting? I'd like to hear from someone performing alongside her."


SCENARIO01-9.KS
16 individual edit locations

[045] *label001831 | physical line 109
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T012
Before:  She knew The Red Chamber starring Sewa Tamaki.
Current: She knew of the production of The Red Chamber starring Sewa Tamaki.

[046] *label001890 | physical line 584
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T013
Before:  His relentless curiosity fixed on the stage.
Current: He watched the stage with relentless curiosity.

[047] *label001903 | physical line 712
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R01
Before:  "I believe myself perfectly sane. Others treat me as such... and yet, in truth, I cannot be certain."
Current: "I hold myself perfectly sane. The world, it seems, agrees. And yet... dare I be certain?"

[048] *label001905 | physical line 728
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R02
Before:  "Perhaps I am mad. Or, if not quite mad, afflicted by some disorder of the mind. Whatever the case, I find this world strangely dull. The very business of being alive bores me beyond all endurance."
Current: "Perhaps I am mad. Or, if not mad, afflicted by some other malady of the mind. Be that as it may, I find this world intolerably dull. The very business of living wearies me beyond endurance."

[049] *label001906 | physical line 735
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T014
Before:  For a moment, its distance from any image of death caught them off guard.
Current: For a moment, the absence of any hint of death caught them off guard.

[050] *label001913 | physical line 786
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R03
Before:  "I had long heard of this red chamber. Bored with everyday life, you founded this club in search of extraordinary thrills. Everyone here has wearied of the ordinary and longs for something beyond it. Am I right?"
Current: "I had long heard tell of this red chamber. Weary of common life, you founded a fellowship devoted to uncommon thrills. All here have tired of the ordinary. You hunger for something more. Am I right?"

[051] *label001916 | physical line 811
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R04
Before:  "--Yet the reason I did not join you until today was that I... forgive the discourtesy... was bored beyond anything people such as yourselves could imagine."
Current: "--Yet I waited until tonight to join you because I... forgive the discourtesy... had carried boredom far beyond the bounds of your imagining."

[052] *label001920 | physical line 848
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R05
Before:  "That game... the suddenness of this admission may startle you... was killing. Actual murder."
Current: "That game... pardon me if the confession startles you... was killing. Actual murder."

[053] *label001923 | physical line 875
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R06
Before:  "Worse still... ah, how can I put it? Of late, I have grown utterly tired even of murder's bloody thrills."
Current: "Worse still... how shall I put it? Of late, even the bloody pleasures of murder have begun to weary me."

[054] *label001928 | physical line 911
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R07
Before:  "My friends, whose spirits are all but murdered by boredom... a thought occurred to me. While I can still tell a coherent tale, I wish to reveal what I have done. And who could be better suited to hear it than the members of this red chamber?"
Current: "My friends, all but slain by boredom... a thought occurred to me. While I may yet tell a coherent tale, let me lay my deeds before you. Who more fitting to hear them than the members of this red chamber?"

[055] *label001929 | physical line 920
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R08
Before:  "Tonight, I have been granted that opportunity. Now, I beg your attention. This is my confession of murder."
Current: "Tonight, you have granted me that opportunity. Lend me your attention. Here, then, is my confession of murder."

[056] *label001963 | physical line 1144
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R09
Before:  "One night, I encountered a peculiar incident. It was that night's events that set me on the path to taking a hundred lives."
Current: "Then, one night, a curious thing befell me. That was the night I took the first step toward a hundred deaths."

[057] *label002004 | physical line 1461
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R10
Before:  "In this instance, it was my mistake. I would probably face no charge. But... suppose I had done it deliberately, with a clear intention to kill. What would it have been then?"
Current: "As it happened, I had made a mistake. I would probably face no charge. But suppose I had acted with intent. Suppose I had meant him to die. What then?"

[058] *label002008 | physical line 1493
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R11
Before:  "My friends, have you ever considered such a method of murder? What a desperately dangerous place this world becomes once you do."
Current: "My friends, have you ever considered murder by such means? Once you have, what a perilous place the world becomes."

[059] *label002016 | physical line 1561
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R12
Before:  "My friends, could any method of murder be safer? People foolishly comfort themselves with the belief that wrongdoing must break the law and receive its punishment."
Current: "My friends, could murder be safer? Men console themselves with a foolish creed: that every wicked act must break a law, and every lawbreaker meet his punishment."

[060] *label002018 | physical line 1579
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R13
Before:  "And so it occurred to me that I might use this method of murder to relieve that deadly boredom. Murder that breaks no law. Murder that no Sherlock Holmes could ever uncover."
Current: "And so I had found a remedy for that mortal boredom. Murder without breaking the law. Murder that not even Sherlock Holmes could uncover."


SCENARIO01-10.KS
8 individual edit locations

[061] *label002054 | physical line 135
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T015
Before:  There's nothing difficult enough to give me the right to be nervous.
Current: With things this straightforward, I have no excuse to be nervous.

[062] *label002080 | physical line 332
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R14
Before:  "Ah, what a dreadful, delightful game it was. The joy of devising an ingenious trick must have rivaled that of an artist. And the delicious tension of putting it into practice!"
Current: "Ah, what a dreadful, delightful game! To devise some ingenious trick--what artist knows a greater joy? And then, the exquisite suspense of putting it to the test!"

[063] *label002094 | physical line 436
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R15
Before:  "My friends, that is how I took ninety-nine lives. And far from feeling the slightest remorse, I have grown tired even of those bloody thrills."
Current: "Thus, my friends, I took ninety-nine lives. I feel not the faintest remorse. Worse still, even those bloody pleasures have begun to weary me."

[064] *label002096 | physical line 454
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R16
Before:  "I ask you, gentlemen, to judge me. Am I mad? Am I what they call a homicidal maniac?"
Current: "Pray judge me, gentlemen. Am I mad? Am I what they call a homicidal maniac?"

[065] *label002131 | physical line 708
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 3
Before:  There was no warning.
Current: It came without warning.

[066] *label002190 | physical line 1124
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R17
Before:  "So was the tale of my life you've been hearing. From beginning to end, every word was invented."
Current: "So was the story of my life. From first word to last, an invention."

[067] *label002193 | physical line 1147
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R18
Before:  "But I am rather a fine actor, wouldn't you say? Now, my chronically bored friends... might this little affair provide some of that stimulation you are forever seeking?"
Current: "Yet I am a rather fine actor, would you not agree? And now, my incurably bored friends... hath this little performance furnished the excitement you crave?"

[068] *label002219 | physical line 1344
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T016
Before:  As for the performance... well, I hesitate to say it myself.
Current: As for the performance... well, I hate to admit it.


SCENARIO02-2.KS
4 individual edit locations

[069] *label002537 | physical line 250
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T017
Before:  Words from a short distance away jab at my ears.
Current: A conversation nearby cuts into my thoughts.

[070] *label002573 | physical line 578
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T018
Before:  "People will criticize our play. That can't be helped. They can say whatever they like about me. I don't mind."
Current: "People will criticize our play. That's bound to happen. They can say whatever they like about me. I don't mind."

[071] *label002575 | physical line 595
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T019
Before:  "--But I won't forgive them for insulting my fellow performer, who acted so wonderfully. Even if it can't be helped... I still can't bear it."
Current: "--But I won't forgive them for insulting my fellow performer, who acted so wonderfully. I know people will talk... but I still can't bear it."

[072] *label002601 | physical line 828
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 4
Before:  From the next week, the full troupe would move on to acting practice.
Current: The following week, the whole troupe would begin acting practice.


SCENARIO02-3.KS
1 individual edit locations

[073] *label002768 | physical line 323
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T020
Before:  "I don't know much about paintings. I think I can do the woman who's lost her love."
Current: "I don't know much about paintings. I think I can play the woman who's been betrayed."


SCENARIO02-5.KS
1 individual edit locations

[074] *label003305 | physical line 931
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T021
Before:  Having pursued this incomprehensible subject, Oboro narrows his eyes as if satisfied.
Current: Oboro finishes his strange line of questioning and narrows his eyes, apparently satisfied.


SCENARIO02-6.KS
1 individual edit locations

[075] *label003616 | physical line 1634
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T022
Before:  'Acquaintances' keeps us at too great a distance.
Current: Calling us acquaintances makes us sound too distant.


SCENARIO02-7.KS
3 individual edit locations

[076] *label003724 | physical line 317
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C10
Before:  "'You must sleep. You must give yourself the mercy of a long, deep sleep.'"
Current: "'Thou must sleep. Grant thyself that mercy: a long, deep sleep.'"

[077] *label003727 | physical line 340
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C11
Before:  "'Let the world take its course. Do not trouble yourself with needless cares. While you sleep, I shall keep watch beside you. And when you wake, perhaps the world will have regained its sweetness.'"
Current: "'Let the world take its course. Lay aside these needless cares. Sleep, and I shall keep watch beside thee. When thou wakest, perhaps the world will be sweet again.'"

[078] *label003889 | physical line 1570
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T023
Before:  she appears without warning or the slightest concern for the atmosphere.
Current: she appears without warning, paying no heed to the mood in the room.


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[079] *label004010 | physical line 715
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T024
Before:  "I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm so sorry for all the trouble we've caused. We will arrange a proper opportunity to explain everything, so please..."
Current: "I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm so sorry for all the trouble we've caused. We'll arrange a time to explain everything properly, so please..."

[080] *label004023 | physical line 798
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T025
Before:  That's the price of fame. It can't be helped.
Current: That's the price of fame. They just have to live with it.

[081] *label004038 | physical line 894
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 5
Before:  To the figures lurking after him whenever he went out...
Current: To the figures shadowing him whenever he went out...


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[082] *label004154 | physical line 57
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T026
Before:  Even so, I was fortunate in my family.
Current: Even so, I was lucky to have the family I did.

[083] *label004161 | physical line 102
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T027
Before:  Fortunately, I was apparently prettier than most. The more I polished myself, the brighter I shone.
Current: Fortunately, I was apparently prettier than most. The more care I put into my appearance, the brighter I shone.


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[084] *label004567 | physical line 1112
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T028
Before:  The present I thought I'd shut my eyes to closes in from behind.
Current: The reality I thought I'd shut out closes in from behind.

[085] *label004567 | physical line 1113
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T029
Before:  My averted gaze is forced back into place.
Current: I'm forced to look at what I've been avoiding.

[086] *label004625 | physical line 1539
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T030
Before:  It seemed less like hatred... and more like he simply didn't know what to do with this foreign presence called me.
Current: It seemed less like hatred... and more like he simply didn't know how to deal with my presence in the family.

[087] *label004654 | physical line 1730
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T031
Before:  "She's training me to be a bride."
Current: "She's preparing me for marriage."


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[088] *label004945 | physical line 1807
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T032
Before:  Then his next words shatter my reason.
Current: Then his next words make me see red.


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[089] *label005402 | physical line 117
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T033
Before:  And so my part-time working life begins.
Current: And so I start my new part-time job.

[090] *label005480 | physical line 902
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T034
Before:  His small retreating back looks a little more dependable now.
Current: As I watch his small figure walk away, he seems a little more dependable.

[091] *label005553 | physical line 1624
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T035
Before:  And then their time begins.
Current: And then they begin.


SCENARIO03-3.KS
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[092] *label005787 | physical line 1333
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P103
Before:  "'Odin's tame swine. When did those all-seeing eyes of yours grow so clouded? All you hold dear is a madman's delusion. It always has been.' ...Yes, that's easier to read."
Current: "'Odin's tame swine. When did those all-seeing eyes grow clouded? All thou holdest dear is a madman's delusion. It always hath been.' ...Yes, that's easier to read."


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[093] *label006069 | physical line 1635
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T036
Before:  We're unanimous on that name.
Current: We all agree.

[094] *label006077 | physical line 1699
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T037
Before:  "She's an actress to the bone. It's as though she was born to perform."
Current: "She's an actress through and through. It's as though she was born to perform."


SCENARIO03-5.KS
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[095] *label006087 | physical line 15
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H01
Before:  "You incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Here, drain this poison! Is not this pearl yours?"
Current: "Thou incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Drink! Drain thine own poison! Is not this pearl thine?"

[096] *label006088 | physical line 22
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H02
Before:  "...And you who watch this tale, pale and trembling... Are you players with no lines to speak? Or merely spectators at some wretched pageant?"
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling... Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[097] *label006093 | physical line 57
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H05
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me onward without mercy. This freezing pain tells me my own end is near."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied. This icy agony foretells mine end."

[098] *label006137 | physical line 373
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C10
Before:  "You must sleep. You must give yourself the mercy of a long, deep sleep."
Current: "Thou must sleep. Grant thyself that mercy: a long, deep sleep."

[099] *label006142 | physical line 406
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C12
Before:  "Let the world take its course. Do not trouble yourself with needless cares. While you sleep, I shall keep watch beside you."
Current: "Let the world take its course. Lay aside these needless cares. Sleep, and I shall keep watch beside thee."

[100] *label006146 | physical line 435
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C13
Before:  "And when you wake, perhaps the world will have regained its sweetness."
Current: "When thou wakest, perhaps the world will be sweet again."

[101] *label006308 | physical line 1768
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T038
Before:  "Now try whispering your love."
Current: "Now tell her you love her. Quietly."


SCENARIO03-6.KS
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[102] *label006415 | physical line 669
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T039
Before:  Niounomiya Omi, our former troupe leader, cut through it all without a word of evasion.
Current: Niounomiya Omi, our former troupe leader, cut through it all without mincing words.


SCENARIO04-1.KS
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[103] *label007187 | physical line 2038
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T040
Before:  If we treat that trust carelessly, the play can never succeed.
Current: If we take that trust for granted, the play can never succeed.


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[104] *label007600 | physical line 1132
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T041
Before:  Her anger retreats, replaced by the red of embarrassment.
Current: Her anger fades, and she blushes with embarrassment.


SCENARIO04-4.KS
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[105] *label007870 | physical line 1745
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T042
Before:  And so I was able to stop acting with a smile.
Current: And so I left acting behind with a smile.


SCENARIO04-5.KS
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[106] *label008033 | physical line 1083
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T043
Before:  Yet she slips in from beyond my awareness to intrude.
Current: Yet she slips in unnoticed and intrudes on my solitude.

[107] *label008054 | physical line 1262
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T044
Before:  "Living in this world isn't important at all. What matters is whether you're happy. Tell me, Kurashina-san. Wouldn't you like to make your love come true?"
Current: "Living in this world isn't important at all. What matters is whether you're happy. Tell me, Kurashina-san. Wouldn't you like her to love you back?"


SCENARIO04-6.KS
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[108] *label008268 | physical line 703
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T045
Before:  "So, Hakodori-san. I'll give you these words one more time."
Current: "So, Hakodori-san. I'll tell you this one more time."

[109] *label008443 | physical line 2075
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T046
Before:  Tears in my eyes, I try to cover for my humiliating display, but...
Current: Tears in my eyes, I try to salvage a little dignity, but...


SCENARIO05-1.KS
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[110] *label008644 | physical line 484
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T047
Before:  "Hehe. Naturally. It's a good thing you looked so free. Doing all this alone would be a bit much, even for me."
Current: "Hehe. Naturally. It's a good thing you weren't busy. Doing all this alone would be a bit much, even for me."

[111] *label008764 | physical line 1441
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T048
Before:  "Sewa-kun and I were discussing the directing today."
Current: "Sewa-kun and I were talking about directing the play today."


SCENARIO05-2.KS
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[112] *label008840 | physical line 34
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P01
Before:  "To Loki, at least, you must seem nothing but evil. There is nothing divine in what you have done."
Current: "To Loki, at least, you must seem evil incarnate. There is naught divine in what you have done."

[113] *label008842 | physical line 52
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P02
Before:  "Do you not fear Loki? Does it not grieve you to have his blade turned against you? Would you truly accept death at his hands?"
Current: "Do you not fear Loki? Does it not grieve you that his blade is turned against you? Would you suffer death at his hands?"

[114] *label008845 | physical line 76
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P03
Before:  "No, I do not understand. Not your thoughts, nor Loki's. I understand none of it. But one truth is plain: I am a knight sworn to this kingdom. If Loki raises his banner in rebellion, I must strike him down."
Current: "No. I understand neither you nor Loki. Yet this I know: I am a knight sworn to this kingdom. Should Loki raise rebellion's banner, I must strike him down."

[115] *label008897 | physical line 494
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 1
Note:    Removed the stray visible + following the voice cue; retained the cue and line.
Current script line: [pv char="rairai" voice=Rairai_0378]

[116] *label008981 | physical line 1121
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T049
Before:  Taken aback by an impulse that makes me feel like someone other than myself.
Current: An impulse so unlike me leaves me reeling.


SCENARIO05-3.KS
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[117] *label009129 | physical line 84
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T050
Before:  "He made our lives miserable. Neglected everything at home and thought handing over money was enough. He never made a single memory with his children. Mother... still hates him."
Current: "He made our lives miserable. Neglected everything at home and thought handing over money was enough. He never took the time to make memories with his children. Mother... still hates him."

[118] *label009297 | physical line 1388
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P65
Before:  "Do you hate me?"
Current: "Dost thou hate me?"


SCENARIO05-4.KS
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[119] *label009514 | physical line 658
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T051
Before:  I use the name I used to call him.
Current: I call him by his old nickname.


SCENARIO05-5.KS
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[120] *label009677 | physical line 10
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P17
Before:  "...Let us speak of the past. Of the days when you and I first met. I was a slave, and you a prince. Yet each of us found something of his own spirit in the other."
Current: "...Let us speak of days gone by. Of our first meeting. I was a slave; thou wert a prince. Yet each found something of himself within the other."

[121] *label009678 | physical line 17
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P18
Before:  "Your deeds always brought disaster. Even so, at times you proved useful. At times, you made even me laugh. You showed me what freedom was."
Current: "Thy deeds brought naught but ruin. Yet thou hadst thy uses. At times, thou couldst make even me laugh. Thou didst show me freedom."

[122] *label009679 | physical line 26
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P19
Before:  "Yes. Freedom. Wings bound by nothing and no one. That was what we longed for. And we long for it still. Do we not, Odin?"
Current: "Yes. Freedom. Wings that naught and no one could bind. Such was our longing then. It is our longing still. Is it not, Odin?"

[123] *label009680 | physical line 33
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P69
Before:  "How could that ever change? I have always lived free."
Current: "How should that ever change? I have ever lived free."

[124] *label009681 | physical line 42
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P20
Before:  "...Yes. That is the King Odin I know. Everyone says you have changed beyond recognition, yet here you are. That, at least, is a truth beyond all doubt."
Current: "...Yes. Here stands the King Odin I knew. They say thou art changed beyond all recognition. Yet here thou standest. Of that, at least, I may be certain."

[125] *label009682 | physical line 49
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P70
Before:  "Yes. You alone understand. The Odin you knew is here."
Current: "Yes. Thou alone dost understand. The Odin thou didst know stands here."

[126] *label009683 | physical line 58
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P21
Before:  "As time passes, a monster begins to stir within me. An unseen devil wears away my conscience and claws at your mask. Ah, but even so! For now, I can forget. If you are there, I can still be Loki."
Current: "With every passing hour, a monster stirs within me. An unseen devil gnaws upon my conscience and claws at thy mask. Ah, but even now... I may forget. Whilst thou art here, I may yet be Loki."

[127] *label009799 | physical line 994
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T052
Before:  I know she's teasing me, but I can't help being conscious of her. That's men for you.
Current: I know she's teasing me, but I can't stop thinking about her that way. That's men for you.


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[128] *label010161 | physical line 1720
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T053
Before:  For all the uncertainty in her expression, her words have a firm core.
Current: Despite the uncertainty in her expression, she speaks with conviction.


SCENARIO05-7.KS
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[129] *label010277 | physical line 605
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T054
Before:  "Then it can't be helped! If it was an offering to Amatsuka-chan, I'm delighted!"
Current: "Then I can't complain! If it was an offering to Amatsuka-chan, I'm delighted!"


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[130] *label010613 | physical line 1572
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T055
Before:  "Theater is a bit of a hurdle for students, isn't it? Unless a good friend is performing, or there's an actor they like, most people wouldn't think of going."
Current: "Getting students to come to the theater is a challenge, isn't it? Unless a good friend is performing, or there's an actor they like, most people wouldn't think of going."


SCENARIO05-9.KS
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[131] *label010673 | physical line 225
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T056
Before:  The actors put on their costumes, teaching their bodies how opening night will feel.
Current: The actors rehearse in costume, getting used to how they'll feel on opening night.

[132] *label010857 | physical line 1758
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T057
Before:  "I'm looking forward to eight days from now. I can hardly wait to act with you, Meguri-chan."
Current: "Only eight days to go. I can hardly wait to act with you, Meguri-chan."


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[133] *label010986 | physical line 807
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T058
Before:  A turn of events beyond comprehension awaited us.
Current: What happened next made no sense.

[134] *label011153 | physical line 2063
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T059
Before:  "No. Fuck that. I'm not someone who can be allowed to fade out in a place like this...!"
Current: "No. Fuck that. I'm not going to fade into obscurity in a place like this...!"


SCENARIO05-11.KS
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[135] *label011334 | physical line 1112
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T060
Before:  I'll dance in the palm of your hand.
Current: I'll dance to your tune.

[136] *label011384 | physical line 1540
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P76
Before:  "Keep quiet? Freyja, what foolish words you weave. I am the one who wishes for peace. I am not the storm tearing this kingdom apart. You are!"
Current: "Be silent? Freyja, what foolish words thou weavest. It is I who seek peace. I am not the storm that rends this kingdom. Thou art!"


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[137] *label011520 | physical line 113
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T061
Before:  "...Burn it into your eyes. Today's performance will give you something to draw on for the rest of your life. Remember every bit of it, good and bad."
Current: "...Take a good look. Today's performance will give you something to draw on for the rest of your life. Remember every bit of it, good and bad."

[138] *label011616 | physical line 727
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P04
Before:  "Don't play the fool. Those walls were built upon a solemn promise. We were bound to pay the agreed reward. And yet you...!"
Current: "Do not play the fool. These walls were raised upon a solemn vow. We owed him the reward we pledged. And yet you...!"

[139] *label011621 | physical line 770
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P05
Before:  "Those walls are splendid indeed. But hardly splendid enough to match my beauty. Deceit? What an ugly word. Blame Loki. He was the one who proposed offering me as payment."
Current: "Splendid walls, indeed. Yet scarcely fit to rival my beauty. Deceit? An ugly word. Blame Loki. It was he who offered me as payment."

[140] *label011624 | physical line 783
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P06
Before:  "...You excuse yourselves and lay all the blame on me. I merely made the suggestion. You agreed to it, every one of you."
Current: "...Ye absolve yourselves and lay it all at my door. I proposed it. Ye gave consent. Every one of you."

[141] *label011625 | physical line 792
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P48
Before:  "One must take responsibility for one's counsel. You should be grateful, Loki. Your cunning has saved your life."
Current: "One must answer for one's counsel. Be grateful, Loki. Thy cunning hath preserved thy life."

[142] *label011630 | physical line 822
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P49
Before:  "Oh, how filthy. Utterly filthy. You lowborn wretch--know your place!"
Current: "Foul. Utterly foul. Thou lowborn wretch--know thy place!"

[143] *label011633 | physical line 845
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P07
Before:  "Remember this! Your deeds have stripped the gods of their nobility. The stain upon those walls turns my stomach!"
Current: "Mark this! Ye have stripped the gods of their nobility. The stain upon these walls sickens me!"

[144] *label011649 | physical line 968
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P08
Before:  "If you're deceived, you have only yourself to blame. The weak have no choice but to suffer."
Current: "Let the deceived bear their own blame. The weak must suffer."

[145] *label011675 | physical line 1170
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P50
Before:  "...Loki. It's you."
Current: "...Loki. It is thou."

[146] *label011676 | physical line 1179
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P51
Before:  "What's wrong, Odin? You look terribly worn out."
Current: "What ails thee, Odin? Thou seemest sorely worn."

[147] *label011677 | physical line 1188
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P52
Before:  "...Nothing. I'm a little tired."
Current: "...Nothing. I am a little weary."

[148] *label011678 | physical line 1195
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P53
Before:  "Why are you covering your right eye? You're worrying me."
Current: "Why dost thou cover thy right eye? Thou givest me cause for fear."

[149] *label011679 | physical line 1202
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P09
Before:  "There is no cause for alarm. This right eye is merely of no further use."
Current: "Be not alarmed. This right eye is of no further use to me."

[150] *label011682 | physical line 1220
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 1
Before:  In the modern age of that distant future, people tell stories about gods--stories known as Norse mythology.
Current: In the modern age of that distant future, people tell stories about gods, stories known as Norse mythology.

[151] *label011684 | physical line 1235
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P54
Before:  "But tell me, Odin. What did you see? What future did those eyes behold?"
Current: "But tell me, Odin. What didst thou see? What future did those eyes behold?"

[152] *label011687 | physical line 1259
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P55
Before:  "--I saw a future in which you destroy this world."
Current: "--I saw a future wherein thou dost destroy this world."

[153] *label011695 | physical line 1298
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P10
Before:  "This eye saw the future. It saw the end of the world. No vague prophecy, no curse. An event already set in stone."
Current: "This eye beheld the days to come. The ending of the world. No misted prophecy. No curse. An event fixed beyond all doubt."

[154] *label011698 | physical line 1322
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P11
Before:  "Three winters shall come in succession, with no summer between. Sudden famine shall plunge the people into terror. Families shall slaughter one another, kin shall defile kin. Cruelty upon cruelty shall rise up to assail us, and lust shall walk unashamed through the streets."
Current: "Three winters shall follow, and no summer come between. Famine shall strike, and terror seize the people. Families shall slaughter one another; kin shall defile kin. Cruelty shall rise upon cruelty, and lust walk shameless through the streets."

[155] *label011700 | physical line 1332
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P12
Before:  "An age of violence shall dawn, and human hearts be torn apart. Even as the world is overturned, mankind shall forget compassion. The sounding horn proclaims the end. The World Tree burns. This world burns to ashes!"
Current: "An age of violence shall dawn, and the hearts of men be torn asunder. Though all the world be overturned, mankind shall forget compassion. The horn proclaims the end. The World Tree burns. The world burns unto ashes!"

[156] *label011702 | physical line 1348
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P13
Before:  "You cannot believe it? Of course you cannot. Men believe only what their own eyes have seen. But I am different! Odin, lord of the gods, has beheld the future. And so I must defy it!"
Current: "Beyond belief? Why, so it must appear. Men credit only what their eyes have seen. But I am Odin, lord of the gods! I have beheld the days to come. And I shall stand against them!"

[157] *label011713 | physical line 1403
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P56
Before:  "...You believe I have lost my mind, don't you? You dismiss my words as a madman's ravings."
Current: "...Thou thinkest me mad, dost thou not? Thou takest my words for a madman's ravings."

[158] *label011716 | physical line 1435
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P14
Before:  "The loss of honor. To stain the history of this kingdom, handed down to those who follow us--that is what we nobles must fear. And so, King Odin, I cannot condone laying false charges against an innocent man."
Current: "The loss of honor. That our kingdom should pass into history stained by our deeds--that is what we nobles must fear. And so, King Odin, I cannot stand by whilst an innocent man is falsely accused."

[159] *label011717 | physical line 1446
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P15
Before:  "You understand well, Baldr. Yes, our place of honor in history is what matters most. History is a mirror of the lives we have lived. And so--we must weave a history that is right."
Current: "Thou dost understand, Baldr. Yes, it is our honor in history that matters. History holds a mirror to our lives. And so... we must make that history right."

[160] *label011718 | physical line 1457
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P16
Before:  "From this moment, we shall expand our armies! We must have the strength to resist the final war that approaches! Arms! Amass more arms! Raise taxes! Conscript soldiers! Use everything at our disposal!"
Current: "From this hour, we shall swell our armies! We must have strength to meet the final war! Arms! More arms! Raise the taxes! Muster the soldiers! Spare nothing!"

[161] *label011719 | physical line 1469
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P57
Before:  "Thor! As supreme commander, much is expected of you. Serve me well until the serpent claims your life."
Current: "Thor! Much is required of thee as supreme commander. Serve me well until the serpent claims thy life."

[162] *label011785 | physical line 1934
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P58
Before:  "Who can say? Perhaps we'll never see him again."
Current: "Who can say? Perhaps we shall never see him again."

[163] *label011792 | physical line 1990
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P59
Before:  "...If nothing else, I want to get you two away from here."
Current: "...If I can do no more, I would at least get you both away from here."

[164] *label011807 | physical line 2093
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P60
Before:  "I'll protect Hel. Father, please save Mother."
Current: "I shall protect Hel. Father, I pray you, save Mother."

[165] *label011809 | physical line 2109
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P61
Before:  "You really do love Hel, don't you, Fenrir?"
Current: "Thou dost love Hel dearly, dost thou not, Fenrir?"

[166] *label011810 | physical line 2116
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T062
Before:  Niounomiya-san's overwhelming skill leaves no doubt of her presence.
Current: Niounomiya-san's overwhelming skill commands everyone's attention.

[167] *label011818 | physical line 2178
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P62
Before:  "If you'll protect me, Brother, then I have nothing to fear."
Current: "If thou wilt protect me, Brother, I have naught to fear."


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[168] (file opening) | physical line 6
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P63
Before:  "Listen, Loki. I have no wish to punish you. I merely wish to keep you bound. I want you to understand that."
Current: "Hear me, Loki. I would not punish thee. I would but keep thee bound. Understand that."

[169] *label011825 | physical line 31
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P64
Before:  "Answer me, Loki. I am taking your child. You have no objection?"
Current: "Answer me, Loki. I am taking thy child. Hast thou any objection?"

[170] *label011918 | physical line 607
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T063
Before:  I'll dance in the palm of your hand, just as you wish.
Current: I'll dance to your tune, just as you wish.

[171] *label011925 | physical line 669
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P65
Before:  "Do you hate me?"
Current: "Dost thou hate me?"

[172] *label011926 | physical line 678
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P66
Before:  "Why would you ask that? Can you think of a reason I should?"
Current: "Why dost thou ask? Canst thou think of cause for me to hate thee?"

[173] *label011929 | physical line 701
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P67
Before:  "Then there's no problem."
Current: "Then all is well."

[174] *label011930 | physical line 712
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P17
Before:  "...Let us speak of the past. Of the days when you and I first met. I was a slave, and you a prince. Yet each of us found something of his own spirit in the other."
Current: "...Let us speak of days gone by. Of our first meeting. I was a slave; thou wert a prince. Yet each found something of himself within the other."

[175] *label011932 | physical line 719
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P18
Before:  "Your deeds always brought disaster. Even so, at times you proved useful. At times, you made even me laugh. You showed me what freedom was."
Current: "Thy deeds brought naught but ruin. Yet thou hadst thy uses. At times, thou couldst make even me laugh. Thou didst show me freedom."

[176] *label011933 | physical line 728
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P19
Before:  "Yes. Freedom. Wings bound by nothing and no one. That was what we longed for. And we long for it still. Do we not, Odin?"
Current: "Yes. Freedom. Wings that naught and no one could bind. Such was our longing then. It is our longing still. Is it not, Odin?"

[177] *label011935 | physical line 744
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P68
Before:  "Tell me, Odin. You're still the same man you were then, aren't you?"
Current: "Tell me, Odin. Thou art still the man thou wert then, art thou not?"

[178] *label011936 | physical line 751
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P69
Before:  "How could that ever change? I have always lived free."
Current: "How should that ever change? I have ever lived free."

[179] *label011938 | physical line 761
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P20
Before:  "...Yes. That is the King Odin I know. Everyone says you have changed beyond recognition, yet here you are. That, at least, is a truth beyond all doubt."
Current: "...Yes. Here stands the King Odin I knew. They say thou art changed beyond all recognition. Yet here thou standest. Of that, at least, I may be certain."

[180] *label011939 | physical line 768
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P70
Before:  "Yes. You alone understand. The Odin you knew is here."
Current: "Yes. Thou alone dost understand. The Odin thou didst know stands here."

[181] *label011940 | physical line 777
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P21
Before:  "As time passes, a monster begins to stir within me. An unseen devil wears away my conscience and claws at your mask. Ah, but even so! For now, I can forget. If you are there, I can still be Loki."
Current: "With every passing hour, a monster stirs within me. An unseen devil gnaws upon my conscience and claws at thy mask. Ah, but even now... I may forget. Whilst thou art here, I may yet be Loki."

[182] *label011944 | physical line 805
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P22
Before:  "Odin, the man I loved. Let me appeal to your sincerity. What is it you want from me? What am I to do?"
Current: "Odin, the man I loved... answer me truly. What wouldst thou have of me? What must I do?"

[183] *label011950 | physical line 854
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P23
Before:  "You need only serve as the foundation of the freedom I embody."
Current: "Thou needst but be the foundation whereon my freedom stands."

[184] *label011960 | physical line 927
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P24
Before:  "Wits alone are not enough, Loki! Struggle all you wish; you can never defeat history! Listen! I will show you how! How to surpass history itself!"
Current: "Cunning will not save thee, Loki! Struggle as thou wilt, thou canst not conquer history! Attend me! I shall show thee how to rise above history itself!"

[185] *label011961 | physical line 938
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P25
Before:  "I don't understand! Why won't you look at me? Why can't my voice reach you? Odin, where has the man you truly are gone?!"
Current: "I do not understand! Why wilt thou not look upon me? Canst thou not hear me? Odin, where is the man I knew?!"

[186] *label011964 | physical line 961
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P71
Before:  "I told you I am here. Have you, too, lost the ability to see me?"
Current: "I told thee: I am here. Hast thou, too, lost the power to see me?"

[187] *label011965 | physical line 973
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P72
Before:  "...No. I'm not the one who can no longer see!"
Current: "...No. It is not I who can no longer see!"

[188] *label011966 | physical line 980
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P73
Before:  "We shall never understand each other again. Your freedom is poison to me. I will hear no more of your feeble sophistry."
Current: "We shall never understand each other more. Thy freedom is poison to me. I will hear no more of thy feeble sophistry."

[189] *label011967 | physical line 989
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P74
Before:  "I despise you, Odin. Your arrogance has shaken everything to its foundations!"
Current: "I despise thee, Odin. Thine arrogance hath shaken all things to their foundations!"

[190] *label011970 | physical line 1013
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 2
Before:  As Loki screams, his face contorted with rage--even the audience recoils in fear.
Current: As Loki screams, his face contorted with rage, even the audience recoils in fear.

[191] *label011977 | physical line 1050
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 3
Before:  If she remains consumed by anger--everything will fall apart.
Current: If she remains consumed by anger, everything will fall apart.

[192] *label011985 | physical line 1115
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 4
Before:  Just because things didn't work out for you--don't let your envy ruin things for us!
Current: Just because things didn't work out for you, don't let your envy ruin things for us!

[193] *label011998 | physical line 1192
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P75
Before:  "Loki... please, keep quiet for now. I know how frustrated you are."
Current: "Loki... pray, be silent for now. I know thy frustration."

[194] *label012000 | physical line 1210
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P76
Before:  "Keep quiet? Freyja, what foolish words you weave. I am the one who wishes for peace. I am not the storm tearing this kingdom apart. You are!"
Current: "Be silent? Freyja, what foolish words thou weavest. It is I who seek peace. I am not the storm that rends this kingdom. Thou art!"

[195] *label012001 | physical line 1217
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P77
Before:  "Even so, be quiet for now. This is for your sake too."
Current: "Yet hold thy peace for now. It is for thine own sake as well."

[196] *label012002 | physical line 1229
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P78
Before:  "Don't make me laugh! I'll take no orders from an ugly hag who beds men for gold. You can't even remember, can you? How many of the men gathered here have shared your bed!"
Current: "Make me not laugh! I take no orders from an ugly hag who beds men for gold. Canst thou even remember how many men in this very company have shared thy bed?"

[197] *label012004 | physical line 1243
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P79
Before:  "Loki! Hold your tongue! Spare us these disgusting fantasies! Nothing ever comes out of your mouth but lies!"
Current: "Loki! Hold thy tongue! Spare us these foul imaginings! Naught but lies ever passes thy lips!"

[198] *label012005 | physical line 1253
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P26
Before:  "Yes, I do love lies. Lies, deceit, and evasion are the only things that have ever loved me. Truth alone refuses to take my side."
Current: "Yes, I love lies. Lies, deceit, evasion--they alone have ever loved me. Truth will never take my part."

[199] *label012007 | physical line 1264
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P80
Before:  "...Stop disgracing yourself. If you have even a shred of pride left, leave this place at once."
Current: "...Cease to disgrace thyself. If thou hast a shred of pride remaining, quit this place at once."

[200] *label012008 | physical line 1273
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P81
Before:  "Heimdall! What are you doing here? Isn't your job to keep your dreary little watch? Go on, get out. Back to your precious peeping!"
Current: "Heimdall! What dost thou here? Is thy task not to keep thy dreary watch? Away with thee! Back to thy precious peeping!"

[201] *label012009 | physical line 1282
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P82
Before:  "If violence were permitted me, I would tear you limb from limb this very instant."
Current: "Were violence permitted me, I would tear thee limb from limb this very instant."

[202] *label012010 | physical line 1291
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P27
Before:  "Odin's tame pig. Those eyes that watch over everything--when did they grow so clouded? All you ever love are a madman's delusions."
Current: "Odin's tame swine. When did those all-seeing eyes grow clouded? All thou holdest dear is a madman's delusion."

[203] *label012022 | physical line 1359
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P83
Before:  "Why did Baldr die? Do you really not understand even that?"
Current: "Why did Baldr die? Canst thou not understand even that?"

[204] *label012023 | physical line 1366
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P84
Before:  "...Oh? You know the truth of Baldr's death?"
Current: "...Oh? Thou knowest the truth of Baldr's death?"

[205] *label012024 | physical line 1375
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P85
Before:  "Not only me. Every one of you must know. Oh, let's see, how did it go? It's written in that ridiculous myth. Ah, yes. I killed Baldr, didn't I? I murdered him in cold blood. I did!"
Current: "Not I alone. Every one of you must know. Now, how went the tale? It stands written in that ridiculous myth. Ah, yes. I killed Baldr, did I not? I slew him in cold blood. I did!"

[206] *label012026 | physical line 1395
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P86
Before:  "No, I am perfectly sane. You are the mad ones!"
Current: "No, I am perfectly sane. Ye are the mad ones!"

[207] *label012032 | physical line 1445
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T064
Before:  A self-absorbed, bewitching performance that steals every trace of anyone else's presence.
Current: A self-absorbed, bewitching performance that makes everyone else seem to disappear.

[208] *label012059 | physical line 1642
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P28
Before:  "...I smell death and arrogance. Suffering burns through my body. Oh, I think I'll go mad. If only everything would end."
Current: "...I smell death and arrogance. Pain burns through me. Oh, I shall go mad. Would that it all might end."

[209] *label012064 | physical line 1677
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P65
Before:  "Do you hate me?"
Current: "Dost thou hate me?"

[210] *label012065 | physical line 1686
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P87
Before:  "No. What I hate is the fate of this world. I will surely die here. But my death means nothing. Even who killed Baldr means nothing."
Current: "No. I hate the fate of this world. Here I shall surely die. Yet my death signifies nothing. Nor does it matter who slew Baldr."

[211] *label012066 | physical line 1693
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P88
Before:  "You mean Norse mythology?"
Current: "Dost thou mean Norse mythology?"

[212] *label012067 | physical line 1702
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P29
Before:  "Slaughter my family, throw me in prison--the end of the world will come all the same. This kingdom will fall before long. That was certain from the moment Odin saw the future. The loss of a few characters is a trifling matter. No one can resist the great tide."
Current: "Slaughter my family. Cast me into prison. The world shall end all the same. This kingdom must fall; that was certain from the hour Odin saw the future. What matters the loss of a few characters? None can turn that tide."

[213] *label012074 | physical line 1748
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P89
Before:  "Lord Odin has changed. He lays hands on the nobles' wives and children, drowning in lust. Of course discontent never ceases. As you say, rebellion will surely come."
Current: "Lord Odin is changed. He lays hands upon the nobles' wives and children, drowning in lust. Small wonder discontent will not be stilled. As thou sayest, rebellion must come."


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[214] *label012112 | physical line 282
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P30
Before:  "--Live, Loki. Act as your heart desires."
Note:    The emphasis tag [ruby text=丶] remains immediately before Live.
Current: "--Live, Loki. Follow thine own heart."

[215] *label012115 | physical line 305
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P90
Before:  "...Are you sure you shouldn't kill me?"
Current: "...Art thou certain thou shouldst not kill me?"

[216] *label012116 | physical line 314
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P31
Before:  "My duty is to watch over you. But even I can let my guard slip. Besides, Loki, I have no wish to cut down a dear friend with my own hands."
Current: "My charge is to guard thee. Yet even I may fail in my vigilance. And I would not cut down a dear friend with mine own hands."

[217] *label012119 | physical line 340
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P32
Before:  "So be it. My sense of right cries out within me. Besides, Loki, even if you rebel, you are destined to die. Then should a friend not walk beside you toward that death?"
Current: "Then let it be treason. My conscience cries out against this. Besides, Loki, if rebellion must lead thee unto death, should a friend not walk beside thee?"

[218] *label012150 | physical line 567
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P33
Before:  "My path to conquest will not end at so paltry an obstacle. Slaughter every traitor. Let them behold the majesty of Odin, god of war!"
Current: "My conquests shall not end at so paltry an obstacle. Slay the traitors! Let them behold the majesty of Odin, god of war!"

[219] *label012152 | physical line 588
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P91
Before:  "Silence! Enough excuses! Go and cut down a traitor or two! Do not show your face before me until this war is won!"
Current: "Silence! Enough excuses! Go, cut down a traitor or two! Show not thy face before me till this war is won!"

[220] *label012156 | physical line 624
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P34
Before:  "Norse mythology is a world too solemn to be called mere myth. No gleam of joy, no promise of happiness--and above it all hangs the threat of inescapable ruin. Doomed to die, knowing they will be defeated, they rise to meet the enemy."
Current: "Norse mythology is too solemn a world to be called mere myth. No gleam of joy. No promise of happiness. Only the shadow of inescapable ruin. Though defeat awaits them, though death be certain, the gods rise to meet the foe."

[221] *label012158 | physical line 642
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P35
Before:  "And so, no half-hearted resolve can overcome it. Without a miracle worthy of godhood, Norse mythology cannot be denied."
Current: "Half-hearted resolve shall never overthrow it. To defy Norse mythology demands a miracle worthy of a god."

[222] *label012160 | physical line 657
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P36
Before:  "Almost! The moment of victory is almost here! Then why does my body tremble? Am I afraid of some nameless thing?!"
Current: "So near! Victory is so near! Wherefore, then, do I tremble? What nameless thing do I fear?!"

[223] *label012164 | physical line 694
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P37
Before:  "...Behold, storytellers of the future. History must be told faithfully. Look well upon the end of the evil god Loki."
Current: "...Behold, ye storytellers yet unborn. Tell history faithfully. Look upon the end of Loki, the evil god."

[224] *label012170 | physical line 747
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P37
Before:  "...Behold, storytellers of the future. History must be told faithfully. Look well upon the end of the evil god Loki."
Current: "...Behold, ye storytellers yet unborn. Tell history faithfully. Look upon the end of Loki, the evil god."

[225] *label012172 | physical line 766
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P92
Before:  "...The rebels have taken the palace. It's over."
Current: "...The rebels have taken the palace. It is over."

[226] *label012175 | physical line 791
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P93
Before:  "Yes. But you and I still live. The myth cannot end while its gods survive, can it?"
Current: "Yes. Yet thou and I still live. The myth cannot end whilst its gods survive, can it?"

[227] *label012178 | physical line 813
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P94
Before:  "...Odin, what you wish for--"
Current: "...Odin, what thou desirest--"

[228] *label012193 | physical line 923
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P95
Before:  "You must understand. We are both here, now. And I do not regret this moment in the slightest."
Current: "Thou must understand. We are both here, now. And not for an instant do I repent this moment."

[229] *label012242 | physical line 1300
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P96
Before:  "Odin, even if you become a tyrant and slaughter my family, I cannot kill you!"
Current: "Odin, though thou become a tyrant and slaughter all my family, I cannot kill thee!"

[230] *label012246 | physical line 1329
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P97
Before:  "You believed in what you thought was best, and followed it to the end--"
Current: "Thou didst believe in what thou thoughtest best, and follow it unto the end--"

[231] *label012248 | physical line 1343
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P98
Before:  "...Is that your truth?"
Current: "...Is that thy truth?"

[232] *label012251 | physical line 1366
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P38
Before:  "Yes, it is! Laugh if you wish! The truth is, I don't understand you at all! I no longer know who you truly are! All I know--is that you want me to see this farce through to its end!"
Current: "Yes! Laugh if thou wilt! I do not understand thee. I know no longer who thou art! I know but this: thou wouldst have me play this farce unto its end!"

[233] *label012252 | physical line 1375
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P99
Before:  "Enough, you say? How easily you say it, knowing nothing of my heart! Oh, why am I like this? Even before the man who killed my family, I cannot draw my sword! In those savage eyes, I still see the man you were! Oh, forgive me, my beloved children! I have failed you as a father!"
Current: "Enough, sayest thou? How lightly thou speakest, knowing naught of my heart! Oh, why am I thus? Before the man who slew my family, still I cannot draw my sword! Within those savage eyes I see the man thou wert! Forgive me, my beloved children! I have failed you as a father!"

[234] *label012253 | physical line 1384
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P39
Before:  "Even now, I cannot stop wishing! That you might become your old, gentle self and hold me! That you might become the Odin I loved and smile at me again!"
Current: "Even now, I cannot cease to long for it! That thine old gentleness might return, that thou mightst hold me in thine arms! That the Odin I loved might smile upon me once again!"

[235] *label012256 | physical line 1404
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P40
Before:  "Even now, I cherish you from the bottom of my heart. Your pure heart has not changed since those days. Even if the myth remains unshaken--I will let no one deny that I loved you."
Current: "Still do I love thee with all my heart. Thy heart is pure as in those former days. Though the myth stand unbroken, none shall say I loved thee not."

[236] *label012261 | physical line 1436
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P41
Before:  "Let yourself be killed, your purity intact. That is the final fate I wish for you."
Current: "Die, then, with thy purity untouched. Such is the end I wish for thee."

[237] *label012263 | physical line 1452
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P42
Before:  "Everyone I love has vanished. Those who believe are never saved. This world holds only despair that cannot be resisted. Unending suffering burns my soul to ashes."
Current: "All whom I love are gone. Those who believe find no salvation. This world holds only despair, and we are powerless before it. Unending suffering burns my soul to ashes."

[238] *label012264 | physical line 1461
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P100
Before:  "Even so, I will not hate you. The kindness you gave me that day--no violence in all the world can destroy it."
Current: "Even so, I will not hate thee. The kindness thou didst show me that day--no violence in all the world can destroy it."

[239] *label012266 | physical line 1494
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P44
Before:  "...This is as it should be. You were noble to the very end. Rest now. Surely violence cannot reach its wicked hand into the next world."
Current: "...It is as it should be. Noble unto the last. Rest now. Surely violence cannot stretch its wicked hand into the world beyond."

[240] *label012267 | physical line 1501
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P101
Before:  "...I knew you were innocent. I knew you could never raise a rebellion. I even knew--that you could never kill me."
Current: "...I knew thee innocent. I knew thou couldst never rise in rebellion. I knew, too--that thou couldst never kill me."

[241] *label012270 | physical line 1520
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 5
Before:  Unlike Loki's beautiful death--his fate is to die in ugliness and cruelty.
Current: Unlike Loki's beautiful death, his fate is to die in ugliness and cruelty.

[242] *label012273 | physical line 1549
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P102
Before:  "To hell with Norse mythology! How dare you insult my father! Give me back the family I love! Because of you, everyone--everyone was made to suffer!"
Current: "To hell with Norse mythology! How darest thou insult my father! Give me back the family I love! Through thee, all of them--all were made to suffer!"

[243] *label012276 | physical line 1570
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P45
Before:  "I will never let this be the story they tell! Odin! I will tell the world what a monstrous tyrant you were! And I will preserve my father's innocence and nobility in history! The cruelest, most vicious king who ever lived! No words could suit you better!"
Current: "This shall not be the tale they tell! Odin! The world shall know thee for the monster thou wert! And history shall preserve my father's innocence and nobility! The cruelest, most vicious of kings--that is the name thou hast earned!"

[244] *label012277 | physical line 1582
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P46
Before:  "Good. See that you do. By accomplishing that--you will grant me victory. Norse mythology will perish."
Current: "Good. See that thou dost. In doing so, thou grantest me my victory. Norse mythology shall perish."

[245] *label012278 | physical line 1591
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P47
Before:  "Tragedy makes men heroes. Heroes become gods, and gods give birth to myths! Preserve his name! Spread word of his nobility! You will inherit a new mythology!"
Current: "Tragedy makes heroes of men. Heroes become gods; gods give birth to myths! Preserve his name! Proclaim his nobility! A new mythology shall be thine inheritance!"


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[246] *label012350 | physical line 315
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 6
Before:  "If I kept hiding out here forever--that old bastard would beat some sense into me."
Current: "If I kept hiding out here forever, that old bastard would beat some sense into me."


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[247] *label013053 | physical line 1145
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C10
Before:  "'You must sleep. You must give yourself the mercy of a long, deep sleep.'"
Current: "'Thou must sleep. Grant thyself that mercy: a long, deep sleep.'"


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[248] *label013160 | physical line 520
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T065
Before:  She cuts across my words to deny them.
Current: She cuts me off with a flat denial.


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[249] *label013567 | physical line 1705
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T066
Before:  "You said we should put it on hold! But if Rize and I stay in the troupe, it'll be a disaster! I'll kiss her in front of everyone! We'll be all over each other! A complete eyesore! We'd only get in the way, right?!"
Current: "You said we should put it on hold! But if Rize and I stay in the troupe, it'll be a disaster! I'll kiss her in front of everyone! We'll be all over each other! Everyone will be sick of us! We'd only get in the way, right?!"


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[250] *label013876 | physical line 147
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T067
Before:  Nervousness leaves a faint dampness on my palm.
Current: My palm is a little sweaty with nerves.

[251] *label014174 | physical line 2452
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T068
Before:  "You look free. We'll do it today. I'm busy too."
Current: "You don't look busy. We'll do it today. I've got things to do too."


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[252] *label015184 | physical line 1184
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T069
Before:  For now, I'll keep living without forgetting how to try.
Current: For now, I'll keep living. I'll keep trying.

[253] *label015225 | physical line 1491
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 7
Before:  If I stop thinking right here, right now--I can still be an angel.
Current: If I stop thinking right here, right now, I can still be an angel.

[254] *label015249 | physical line 1663
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 8
Before:  Those memories are frighteningly sweet--and honestly, I still dream about them sometimes.
Current: Those memories are frighteningly sweet, and honestly, I still dream about them sometimes.


SCENARIO06B-2.KS
3 individual edit locations

[255] *label015346 | physical line 514
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 2
Before:  That's what I want to believe--.
Note:    Removed the period after the unfinished dash.
Current: That's what I want to believe--

[256] *label015414 | physical line 1012
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T070
Before:  I hated Mirai, and Mirai looked down on me from the bottom of her heart.
Current: I hated Mirai, and Mirai felt nothing but contempt for me.

[257] *label015492 | physical line 1536
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T071
Before:  Everything rests in the palm of her hand.
Current: She holds all the cards.


SCENARIO06B-3.KS
4 individual edit locations

[258] *label015714 | physical line 1285
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 9
Before:  Perhaps you knew I loved you, and only pretended not to notice--because you couldn't indulge such manufactured feelings.
Current: Perhaps you knew I loved you, and only pretended not to notice, because you couldn't indulge such manufactured feelings.

[259] *label015723 | physical line 1345
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T072
Before:  You aren't even trying to make that love come true, are you?
Current: You aren't even trying to win his love, are you?

[260] *label015761 | physical line 1623
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 10
Before:  "So wish for it. Don't get the words of your confession wrong. Not a single word. If you want to know whether your feelings are real--give it a try."
Current: "So wish for it. Don't get the words of your confession wrong. Not a single word. If you want to know whether your feelings are real, give it a try."

[261] *label015763 | physical line 1636
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T073
Before:  "If you love him, you can do it, can't you? If your feelings are real, you can do anything to make that love come true."
Current: "If you love him, you can do it, can't you? If your feelings are real, you can do anything to be with him."


SCENARIO06B-4.KS
1 individual edit locations

[262] *label015973 | physical line 813
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T074
Before:  Her improper desires are leaking everywhere.
Current: Her intentions couldn't be more obvious.


SCENARIO06B-6.KS
2 individual edit locations

[263] *label016555 | physical line 848
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T075
Before:  "I suppose we'll have to keep steadily working at her online activities. Nanana would probably find it easier to work independently, too..."
Current: "I suppose we'll have to build up her online presence bit by bit. Nanana would probably find it easier to work independently, too..."

[264] *label016602 | physical line 1171
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T076
Before:  "That's endlessly terrifying... But..."
Current: "That's terrifying on so many levels... But..."


SCENARIO06B-7.KS
1 individual edit locations

[265] *label016885 | physical line 1466
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 3
Note:    Removed the period after the final -- in the unfinished thought.
Current: So I wondered whether I was taking advantage of those feelings--


SCENARIO06B-8.KS
2 individual edit locations

[266] *label017149 | physical line 1712
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 11
Before:  Today is its release date--and she's even holding a major book signing.
Current: Today is its release date, and she's even holding a major book signing.

[267] *label017174 | physical line 1898
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 12
Before:  And if her boyfriend was her own brother--that would make it all the more sensational.
Current: And if her boyfriend was her own brother, that would make it all the more sensational.


SCENARIO07-1.KS
2 individual edit locations

[268] *label017384 | physical line 1302
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T077
Before:  I lack an interest in things that matter to people.
Current: The things that matter to other people don't interest me.

[269] *label017413 | physical line 1494
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T078
Before:  What is it that your words, your gestures, your acting drive mad within us?
Current: What is it in us that your words, your gestures, your acting drive mad?


SCENARIO07-2.KS
1 individual edit locations

[270] *label017798 | physical line 2039
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T079
Before:  "Show me your pathetic, shitty acting. Crawl in the dirt, cover yourselves in mud, and prove your worth. Don't worry... Onstage, this world is equal. Whatever your circumstances, once the curtain rises, you can fight."
Current: "Show me your pathetic, shitty acting. Crawl in the dirt, cover yourselves in mud, and prove your worth. Don't worry... Onstage, everyone stands on equal ground. Whatever your circumstances, once the curtain rises, you can fight."


SCENARIO07-3.KS
3 individual edit locations

[271] *label017903 | physical line 673
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T080
Before:  Members overflowing with personality.
Current: A troupe full of larger-than-life personalities.

[272] *label018031 | physical line 1566
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T081
Before:  Even as the last train approached, he made no move to leave.
Current: Even with the last train due to leave soon, he made no move to go.

[273] *label018067 | physical line 1811
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T082
Before:  An inexperienced young woman who knew nothing of manipulation danced in the palm of his hand.
Current: An inexperienced young woman who knew nothing of manipulation, I danced to his tune.


SCENARIO07-4.KS
4 individual edit locations

[274] *label018290 | physical line 1019
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 13
Before:  If only today could have lasted forever--...
Current: If only today could have lasted forever...

[275] *label018357 | physical line 1528
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T083
Before:  That desperate wish drove my eyes to search.
Current: Driven by that desperate wish, I searched for any sign of life.

[276] *label018376 | physical line 1671
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T084
Before:  All that pathetic struggling, and I hadn't made a single thing come true.
Current: All that pathetic struggling, and I hadn't realized a single dream.

[277] *label018399 | physical line 1831
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 4
Before:  The truth was, I'd known.
Note:    Removed the full stop so the sentence continues into the following box.
Note:    Following box: why our days had been so fulfilling since we founded Lambiris.
Current: The truth was, I'd known


SCENARIO07-5.KS
3 individual edit locations

[278] *label018452 | physical line 307
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 14
Before:  Before the performance begins, we would like to ask our audience--...
Current: Before the performance begins, we would like to ask our audience...

[279] *label018480 | physical line 534
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T085
Before:  "...Just as I thought. Kakehashi, you're an actress to the bone."
Current: "...Just as I thought. Kakehashi, you're an actress through and through."

[280] *label018511 | physical line 804
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 5
Before:  ...That's why I can't understand.
Note:    Removed the full stop so the next text line supplies the object of understand.
Note:    Following text line: the true happiness that lies beyond the concept of death.
Current: ...That's why I can't understand


SCENARIO07-6.KS
5 individual edit locations

[281] *label018617 | physical line 18
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T086
Before:  Whenever I delivered a good performance, those words came out like a stock introduction.
Current: Whenever I delivered a good performance, I heard the same stock phrase.

[282] *label018714 | physical line 695
Change: Theatrical language: Literary recitations and fairy-tale improvisation
Reference: L01
Before:  "'To me, you're still just a boy like a hundred thousand other boys. So I don't particularly need you. And you don't particularly need me. To you, I'm no different from a hundred thousand other foxes.'"
Current: "'To me, you are still a boy like a hundred thousand other boys. I have no need of you, and you have no need of me. To you, I am a fox like a hundred thousand other foxes.'"

[283] *label018716 | physical line 711
Change: Theatrical language: Literary recitations and fairy-tale improvisation
Reference: L02
Before:  "'But if you tame me, we'll become necessary to each other. To me, you'll be the only person in the world. And to you, I'll be the only fox in the world...'"
Current: "'But if you tame me, we shall need one another. To me, you will be the only boy in all the world. And to you, I shall be the only fox...'"

[284] *label018828 | physical line 1520
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T087
Before:  In other words, I'm someone who lives in this world, too.
Current: After all, I live in this world, too.

[285] *label018875 | physical line 1867
Change: Theatrical language: Literary recitations and fairy-tale improvisation
Reference: L03
Before:  "'When night comes, look at the stars. My star is too small for me to show you where it is. But that's better. My star will be one among all the stars filling the night sky.'"
Current: "'At night, look up at the stars. Mine is too small for me to show you where it is. But that is better. It will be one among all the stars in the sky.'"


SCENARIO07B-1.KS
1 individual edit locations

[286] *label018934 | physical line 468
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T088
Before:  No... A reason is such a small thing.
Current: No... Does the reason really matter?


SCENARIO07B-4.KS
1 individual edit locations

[287] *label019889 | physical line 1013
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T089
Before:  "...I want to give all these feelings a form. Wherever we are, whatever the time."
Current: "...I want to show you how I feel. Wherever we are, whatever the time."


SCENARIO07B-5.KS
1 individual edit locations

[288] *label020379 | physical line 2430
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T090
Before:  To keep our relationship as it is, I decide we can put off confirming our answers a little longer.
Current: To keep our relationship as it is, I decide we can put off saying it out loud a little longer.


SCENARIO08-1.KS
1 individual edit locations

[289] *label020633 | physical line 1817
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T091
Before:  "...That's right. My life in reality was already as good as over. I've had more than my fill of despair and suffering. There's nothing left I want to make come true."
Current: "...That's right. My life in reality was already as good as over. I've had more than my fill of despair and suffering. I don't have any dreams left to fulfill."


SCENARIO08-2.KS
1 individual edit locations

[290] *label020913 | physical line 1692
Change: Punctuation
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 15
Before:  Leaving his wife to care for their two babies, her husband had the gall to have an affair with another actress--and fell seriously in love with her.
Current: Leaving his wife to care for their two babies, her husband had the gall to have an affair with another actress, and fell seriously in love with her.


SCENARIO08-3.KS
1 individual edit locations

[291] *label021297 | physical line 2031
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T092
Before:  Had I really fallen so far short in how hard I worked?
Current: Had I really not worked hard enough?


SCENARIO08-5.KS
2 individual edit locations

[292] *label021954 | physical line 1978
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H03
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling."
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling..."

[293] *label021956 | physical line 1991
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H04
Before:  "...Do you think yourselves players without lines? Or an audience to some cheap spectacle?"
Current: "Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"


SCENARIO08B-1.KS
10 individual edit locations

[294] *label022073 | physical line 728
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H14
Before:  "Wh-what are you doing? I am only wounded!"
Current: "Wh-what dost thou? I am but wounded!"

[295] *label022074 | physical line 742
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H01
Before:  "You incestuous, murderous King of Denmark! Here, drink this poison! Is this not your pearl!?"
Current: "Thou incestuous, murderous king of Denmark! Drink! Drain thine own poison! Is not this pearl thine?"

[296] *label022090 | physical line 876
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H02
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling... Do you think yourselves actors with no lines to speak? Or spectators at some farcical play?"
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling... Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[297] *label022092 | physical line 892
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H05
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me on without mercy. This pain, cold enough to freeze me, tells me that my end is near."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied. This icy agony foretells mine end."

[298] *label022095 | physical line 913
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H07
Before:  "Horatio, I can go no further. At least you must live to tell the tale... Tell the truth of all that happened, so that even those who know nothing of it may understand...!"
Current: "Horatio, I am lost. Thou must live. To those who know it not, tell all that hath befallen us. Tell it plainly. Tell it true...!"

[299] *label022098 | physical line 932
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H08
Before:  "What are you saying, my lord? There is still wine left for Horatio."
Current: "What say you, my lord? There is wine enough yet for Horatio."

[300] *label022099 | physical line 941
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H09
Before:  "As you are a man, Horatio! Give me the cup. Let go! I beg you, Horatio!"
Current: "If thou art a man, Horatio, give me the cup! Let go! Horatio, I beseech thee!"

[301] *label022102 | physical line 962
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H10
Before:  "If the truth is buried, I shall leave behind a tainted name. ...If ever you held me in any affection, delay your journey to heaven a little longer..."
Current: "If truth lie buried with me, what a wounded name I leave behind... If ever thou didst hold me dear, forgo the peace of heaven yet awhile..."

[302] *label022103 | physical line 971
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H11
Before:  "Live on, endure the suffering of this world, and tell them of Hamlet, who pursued his ideals until he became a monster! Tell them of the meaningless deed he called revenge...!"
Current: "Live! Bear thou the anguish of this world, and tell of Hamlet, who pursued his ideal and became a monster! Tell them how vain a thing is vengeance...!"

[303] *label022108 | physical line 1006
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H12
Before:  "A noble heart has fallen. Good night, sweet Hamlet. May choirs of angels sing you to your rest."
Current: "Now cracks a noble heart. Good night, sweet prince. And flights of angels sing thee to thy rest."


SCENARIO08B-2.KS
8 individual edit locations

[304] *label022295 | physical line 636
Change: Theatrical language: Literary recitations and fairy-tale improvisation
Reference: L04
Before:  "...Mirror, mirror. Who is the fairest in all the world?"
Current: "Mirror, mirror, tell me true: who in all the world is fairest?"

[305] *label022299 | physical line 658
Change: Theatrical language: Literary recitations and fairy-tale improvisation
Reference: L05
Before:  "Mirror, mirror. Who is the happiest in all the world?"
Current: "Mirror, mirror, tell me true: who in all the world is happiest?"

[306] *label022327 | physical line 871
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T093
Before:  "Even though I'm no good, I could feel that! I probably can't give an impressive performance in front of people... but I still love being someone who acts!"
Current: "Even though I'm no good, I could feel that! I probably can't give an impressive performance in front of people... but I still love being an actor!"

[307] *label022345 | physical line 991
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T094
Before:  "Please take good care of us beginners!"
Current: "We're counting on you to show us the ropes!"

[308] *label022360 | physical line 1120
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R01
Before:  "I certainly consider myself sane, and others treat me as such... Yet I do not know whether I truly am."
Current: "I hold myself perfectly sane. The world, it seems, agrees. And yet... dare I be certain?"

[309] *label022364 | physical line 1143
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R02
Before:  "Perhaps I am mad. Or, if not that, perhaps I suffer from some other disorder of the mind. In any case, I find this world strangely dull. The very business of being alive bores me beyond endurance."
Current: "Perhaps I am mad. Or, if not mad, afflicted by some other malady of the mind. Be that as it may, I find this world intolerably dull. The very business of living wearies me beyond endurance."

[310] *label022368 | physical line 1182
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R14
Before:  "Ah, what a terrible, delightful game it was. The joy of devising a clever trick, surely equal to that of an artist. The thrilling tension of putting that trick into practice."
Current: "Ah, what a dreadful, delightful game! To devise some ingenious trick--what artist knows a greater joy? And then, the exquisite suspense of putting it to the test!"

[311] *label022370 | physical line 1198
Change: Theatrical language: The Red Chamber
Reference: R16
Before:  "Please, judge for yourselves. Am I mad? Am I what one might call a homicidal maniac?"
Current: "Pray judge me, gentlemen. Am I mad? Am I what they call a homicidal maniac?"


SCENARIO08B-4.KS
2 individual edit locations

[312] *label022758 | physical line 364
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 6
Note:    Inserted your in I call your bluff.
Current: "I call your bluff. That's a lie."

[313] *label023037 | physical line 2357
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 7
Note:    Corrected the speaker from Sewa Tamaki to Shirasaka, matching voice cue Hana_0322.
Current script line: [name fn="Shirasaka"]"Yes!"[ps]


SCENARIO08B-5.KS
4 individual edit locations

[314] *label023040 | physical line 12
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C10
Before:  "'You must sleep. You must give yourself the mercy of a long, deep sleep.'"
Current: "'Thou must sleep. Grant thyself that mercy: a long, deep sleep.'"

[315] *label023071 | physical line 246
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H02
Before:  "...You who watch this tale, pale and trembling... Do you think yourselves actors with no lines to speak? Or spectators at some farcical play?"
Current: "...Ye who look upon this tale, pale and trembling... Are ye players bereft of speech? Or spectators at this hollow pageant?"

[316] *label023073 | physical line 260
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H06
Before:  "Death's messenger drives me on without mercy."
Current: "Death drives me hence and will not be denied."

[317] *label023074 | physical line 267
Change: Theatrical language: Hamlet
Reference: H07
Before:  "Horatio, I can go no further. At least you must live to tell the tale... Tell the truth of all that happened, so that even those who know nothing of it may understand...!"
Current: "Horatio, I am lost. Thou must live. To those who know it not, tell all that hath befallen us. Tell it plainly. Tell it true...!"


SCENARIO09-1.KS
5 individual edit locations

[318] *label023353 | physical line 87
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T095
Before:  Before the pressure to conform that we call society, no one is allowed to show their true feelings.
Current: Under society's pressure to conform, no one is allowed to show their true feelings.

[319] *label023354 | physical line 93
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: Earlier report: punctuation 16; T096
Before:  And this doesn't begin in adulthood. Even in small communities--elementary school, middle school--it is firmly established as an unspoken rule.
Current: And it doesn't start in adulthood. Even in the small worlds of elementary and middle school, it's an unspoken rule.

[320] *label023377 | physical line 244
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 8
Note:    Corrected wits end to wits' end; retained the surrounding wording.
Current: I was at my wits' end trying to hold back the excitement I felt while we were changing clothes for gym class.

[321] *label023475 | physical line 897
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T097
Before:  A daring smile tugged at the girl's cheeks.
Current: A bold smile spread across the girl's face.

[322] *label023510 | physical line 1131
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T098
Before:  Simply putting things in the wrong order had shaken my confidence.
Current: Simply learning things in the wrong order had shaken my confidence.


SCENARIO09-3.KS
14 individual edit locations

[323] *label023888 | physical line 163
Change: Prose correction
Reference: Earlier report: selected prose 6
Before:  Gradually, I began to feel a real grasp of acting.
Current: Gradually, I began to develop a real grasp of acting.

[324] *label024006 | physical line 929
Change: Conservative correction
Reference: Earlier report: retained correction 9
Note:    Added the missing final period inside the dialogue quotation.
Current: "I want you to continue to hold me like this."

[325] *label024094 | physical line 1539
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T099
Before:  Before time, every emotion was equal.
Current: All emotions were equal in the face of time.

[326] *label024103 | physical line 1604
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C02
Before:  "'Everything seems terribly complicated. Yet it is all perfectly simple.'"
Current: "'How tangled all appears. And yet, how simple.'"

[327] *label024155 | physical line 1969
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C01
Before:  "'In this world where no one is innocent, where there is no judge, who will pronounce me guilty!?'"
Current: "'Where none is innocent, where no judge sits, who dares pronounce me guilty?'"

[328] *label024158 | physical line 1992
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C02
Before:  "'Everything seems terribly complicated. Yet it is all perfectly simple.'"
Current: "'How tangled all appears. And yet, how simple.'"

[329] *label024160 | physical line 2006
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C03
Before:  "'If I had obtained the moon, if I had been content with love, everything would have been different. But where can I quench this thirst in my heart?'"
Current: "'Had I but held the moon, had love sufficed, all might have been otherwise. Yet where shall I quench this thirst within my heart?'"

[330] *label024163 | physical line 2028
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C14
Before:  "'Nothing in this world or the next is right for me. But I know, and you must know, too...'"
Current: "'Nothing in this world, nor in the next, is made for me. Yet I know... and thou must know it too...'"

[331] *label024166 | physical line 2049
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C05
Before:  "'That all I need is the impossible. The impossible! I have sought it at the ends of the world and in every corner of myself.'"
Current: "'That the impossible is all I need. The impossible! I have sought it at the ends of the earth, in every corner of my soul!'"

[332] *label024169 | physical line 2072
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C06
Before:  "'I reached out both hands, and still I reach out. Yet it is you I find. You, always standing right before me.'"
Current: "'I stretched forth both my hands. I stretch them forth still. Yet all I find is thee. Thee, ever standing before me.'"

[333] *label024172 | physical line 2093
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C07
Before:  "'And now I burn with hatred for you. I did not follow the path I should have taken. There is nowhere to go. My freedom is useless. Nothing! Still nothing!'"
Current: "'And now I burn with hatred for thee. I took the wrong road. There is nowhere left to go. My freedom is powerless. Nothing! Still nothing!'"

[334] *label024175 | physical line 2115
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C08
Before:  "'Helicon did not return. We will bear our guilt forever! This night is as heavy as human suffering.'"
Current: "'Helicon hath not returned. We shall bear our guilt forever! This night weighs upon me with all the suffering of mankind.'"

[335] *label024178 | physical line 2134
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T100
Before:  They came from within me, who had given everything to acting, brandishing murderous blades!
Current: They came from within me--from the self that had given everything to acting--brandishing murderous blades!

[336] *label024181 | physical line 2157
Change: Theatrical language: Caligula
Reference: C09
Before:  "'History, Caligula! Back into history!'"
Current: "'Into history, Caligula! Back into history!'"


SCENARIO09-4.KS
1 individual edit locations

[337] *label024377 | physical line 1522
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T101
Before:  "I am, we are, you are, all of you... We're actors as long as we're alive. Our greatest work has to be our next performance. To stop moving forward, to stand still, is to give up the challenge."
Current: "Me, you, all of us... We're actors as long as we're alive. Our greatest work has to be our next performance. To stop moving forward, to stand still, is to give up the challenge."


SCENARIO09-5.KS
4 individual edit locations

[338] *label024489 | physical line 231
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T102
Before:  People abandoned all order and rushed for the exits, each desperate to escape the clutches of the flames first.
Current: All order broke down as people rushed for the exits, each desperate to escape the flames first.

[339] *label024665 | physical line 1542
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P43
Before:  "...Everyone I love has vanished. Those who believe are never saved. This world holds only despair that cannot be resisted. Unending suffering burns my soul to ashes."
Current: "...All whom I love are gone. Those who believe find no salvation. This world holds only despair, and we are powerless before it. Unending suffering burns my soul to ashes."

[340] *label024667 | physical line 1558
Change: Theatrical language: Philia
Reference: P100
Before:  "Even so, I will not hate you. The kindness you gave me that day--no violence in all the world can destroy it."
Current: "Even so, I will not hate thee. The kindness thou didst show me that day--no violence in all the world can destroy it."

[341] *label024724 | physical line 1977
Change: English phrasing and translationese
Reference: T103
Before:  So, Hyouko... I wanted her to watch over me from where she was.
Current: I wanted Hyouko to watch over me from wherever she was.


6. HONORIFIC ADDRESS LOCATION INDEX

All rows below are present in the current patch. The Occurrences column counts
Onii-chan within that physical text line, including any stammered form.

Scenario file         Label             Line  Occurrences Current form    
scenario01-7.ks       *label001422       523            1 Onii-chan       
scenario01-7.ks       *label001432       605            1 Onii-chan       
scenario01-7.ks       *label001434       618            1 Onii-chan       
scenario01-7.ks       *label001438       645            1 Onii-chan       
scenario01-7.ks       *label001443       677            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-1.ks       *label002394       707            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-9.ks       *label004309      1163            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-9.ks       *label004315      1202            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-9.ks       *label004332      1313            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-12.ks      *label005101      1047            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-12.ks      *label005146      1410            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-12.ks      *label005148      1426            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-12.ks      *label005165      1562            1 Onii-chan       
scenario02-12.ks      *label005175      1642            1 Onii-chan       
scenario03-1.ks       *label005201       150            1 Onii-chan       
scenario03-1.ks       *label005217       287            1 Onii-chan       
scenario03-1.ks       *label005222       320            1 Onii-chan       
scenario03-1.ks       *label005388      1733            1 Onii-chan       
scenario06-2.ks       *label012642       306            1 Onii-chan       
scenario06b-3.ks      *label015839      2188            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020864      1356            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020871      1402            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020881      1468            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020892      1540            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020932      1820            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-2.ks       *label020949      1939            1 O-Onii-chan     
scenario08-2.ks       *label020973      2095            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021038       337            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021042       365            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021082       626            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021141      1030            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021150      1069            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021182      1273            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021200      1398            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021252      1738            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021271      1866            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021291      1993            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021310      2147            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021315      2181            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021326      2253            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021334      2312            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-3.ks       *label021354      2441            1 O-Onii-chan     
scenario08-5.ks       *label021679        45            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-5.ks       *label021699       192            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08-5.ks       *label021726       378            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022153      1345            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022182      1544            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022185      1564            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022187      1578            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022189      1592            3 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-1.ks      *label022190      1600            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-2.ks      *label022453      1798            1 Onii-chan       
scenario08b-3.ks      *label022624      1109            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-2.ks       *label023749      1105            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-2.ks       *label023785      1345            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-2.ks       *label023827      1615            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023895       208            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023910       301            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023916       340            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023927       418            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023934       463            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023945       533            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023947       546            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023955       602            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label023986       798            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label024029      1096            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label024110      1649            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label024147      1899            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-3.ks       *label024185      2186            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024192        46            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024242       472            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024256       590            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024298       940            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024360      1404            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024364      1437            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024393      1650            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-4.ks       *label024402      1712            1 Onii-chan       
scenario09-5.ks       *label024495       274            1 Onii-chan       

7. VERIFICATION

- All 341 individual Current entries and their locations were checked against
  the finished archive identified by the SHA-256 above.
- All 103 translationese edits and 208 theatrical locations are applied.
- Current name-box counts and all 80 address occurrences were recomputed from
  the 93 included scenario files.
- Today's patch checks preserved CP932, CRLF, physical line mapping, engine
  commands, labels, inline controls, masks, and unrelated archive entries.
- Scenario08-4 is unchanged. It is not inspected or listed in this log.
- The patch has not been tested in-game. Creating this log did not change it.

End of consolidated change log.
